The Painful Truth

 

When your hand is

Gripping my heart

It creates a bond

That tears my layers

Apart at the seems.

You think you’re

Taking me to cloud nine

But with your talons

Piercing my flesh

You are just giving

My blood a wider target

To splat upon,

Spreading me thinner

Than the walls

That exposes our secrets.

Now I feel like a ghost

Stuck between heaven and hell

Till I clear up unfinished business.

So now I’m finished with you,

Its what I got to do

Before I wind up

Haunting my body

Like an abandoned house

With a tragic past.

Reviews

[Mia]

Whoa! This really is quiet intense.
"That exposes our secrets.
Now I feel like a ghost
Stuck between heaven and hell
Till I clear up unfinished business."
What a terrible place to be...how far you must drift from love to feel this trapped and desperate to escape. Wonderful write with such strong feelings.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you young lady.

[Lily Mae]

This grabbed me at the very first and didn't let go.. Very powerful..xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Sorry the poem is all hands, LOL
Thank you :)

[Penlady]

Quite intense. I think the love in these words is the realization for oneself and that is good. That the excitement of the talons are not love, but, obsession, and not love.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, interesting way of looking at it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice view on love. The statement were strong and true. Love allowed us to find connections and we become weaker and a easy target. I like the strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.