Follow Me (Don't)

No matter the influences in our lives the path we take is still our choice.

 

 

Approaching beneath the silvery moon

is a face even God would not recognize.

The chilling fog is his hand

gripping my shoulder.

Paralyzed are my senses,

not from fear

but rather a familiarity.

Through his brown eyes

I see the hole Alice fell down.

when he grins it is like shards of metal

piercing my flesh.

My feet become helpless servants

following him east down a path

that puts up a stellar resistance

like gravity is heading west.

My heavy steps leave no traces

in the quicksand.

His breath looks like

fireflies dancing in the night

while mine sounds like

a wolf stalking the lunar community.

The farther we go

the more the seed of hate grows

around my heart,

till suddenly I find myself alone.

Surrounded in darkness

except a sliver of light

through the trees

gives me just enough clarity to see

I was lead down this path…

by ME!!

Knowing that going back to the beginning

would never be the same

I choose to not move a muscle

until the sunrise comes

to show me forgiveness

                   and my road to salvation

Reviews

[The Random Writings Of ..]

WOW! This is a very intense piece, and yes you are right when you say that no matter the influences in our lives the path we take is our choice.
This piece has such a eerie feel to it, and I can relate to this in my past in so many ways. I love the lines -
"The father we go
the more the seed of hate grows
around my heart,
till suddenly I find myself alone.
Surrounded in darkness
except a sliver of light"
When you realize you are alone, and the hate is wrapped around your heart, you can choose to go one way or another, some people continue down one path, while others go another. When you go on to say - You were lead down this path by me! I think putting me in all caps is important, because it gives the reader exactly the clarity you were speaking of just two lines above. Again it takes great courage to be able to do this. And to be able to come to your road of salvation. This is an excellent write. The vivid descriptions and comparisons are excellent and really take the reader on a journey of the realization that YES you do choose your path, you make your own choices.

[Tree]

Important wisdom. The Journey really is our own. We need to let the best part of us navigate the many trails. Well laid out Dale, enjoyed this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Ed Hart]

very bad trip, but it's a well worn path...the lost sheep get special attention

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

The bad always leads to something good. Thank you sir.