Follow Me (Don't)

No matter the influences in our lives the path we take is still our choice.

 

 

Approaching beneath the silvery moon

is a face even God would not recognize.

The chilling fog is his hand

gripping my shoulder.

Paralyzed are my senses,

not from fear

but rather a familiarity.

Through his brown eyes

I see the hole Alice fell down.

when he grins it is like shards of metal

piercing my flesh.

My feet become helpless servants

following him east down a path

that puts up a stellar resistance

like gravity is heading west.

My heavy steps leave no traces

in the quicksand.

His breath looks like

fireflies dancing in the night

while mine sounds like

a wolf stalking the lunar community.

The farther we go

the more the seed of hate grows

around my heart,

till suddenly I find myself alone.

Surrounded in darkness

except a sliver of light

through the trees

gives me just enough clarity to see

I was lead down this path…

by ME!!

Knowing that going back to the beginning

would never be the same

I choose to not move a muscle

until the sunrise comes

to show me forgiveness

                   and my road to salvation

Reviews

[The Random Writings Of ..]

WOW! This is a very intense piece, and yes you are right when you say that no matter the influences in our lives the path we take is our choice.
This piece has such a eerie feel to it, and I can relate to this in my past in so many ways. I love the lines -
"The father we go
the more the seed of hate grows
around my heart,
till suddenly I find myself alone.
Surrounded in darkness
except a sliver of light"
When you realize you are alone, and the hate is wrapped around your heart, you can choose to go one way or another, some people continue down one path, while others go another. When you go on to say - You were lead down this path by me! I think putting me in all caps is important, because it gives the reader exactly the clarity you were speaking of just two lines above. Again it takes great courage to be able to do this. And to be able to come to your road of salvation. This is an excellent write. The vivid descriptions and comparisons are excellent and really take the reader on a journey of the realization that YES you do choose your path, you make your own choices.

[Sheila Kline]

The truth will set you free! Stay strong as you continue to walk down this road to self discovery and that which will allow you to grow into all you are meant to be!
A very revealing, and redemptive write of "awakening"!!

[Jenny Nelson]

Such a picturesque way of saying we are our own worst enemy, but can be our own savor as well. You really know how to convey a whole lot of emotion and present quite a clear description in order to achieve that. Great piece.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much... appreciate the feed back.

[Dayran]

I recall being enthralled by my own inspired vision of things I experienced as a youth. Eventually I made a home in that well of inspiration I thought was mine. Some years later I came to find that there was another resident. In comparison to her, I was, as your words describe it, uncouthed and wild .... like a wolf. But she ignored it and figured I might change someday.

I'm still working at it today. But I figure, she considers my manliness not entirely wolfish. Can't say why.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks so much for your input.

[Mia]

"I was lead down this path…
by ME!!"
People are good at a lot of things but taking responsibility for their actions is not one of them! I love this poem for taking responsibility! The way you took us on the journey with you was just charming.
"I choose to not move a muscle
until the sunrise comes
to show me forgiveness
and my road to salvation."
The ending is beautiful! Wonderful writing!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks so much for your time and input... you are very right about the responsibility thing.

[Nautili]

This seems full of a recently discovered self-awareness. I doubt you ever will be the same. I hope your road to salvation becomes clearer to you as you take that first step....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much... life is an endless journey of self discovery that we all must take to continue growing spiritually.

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This was a crafty display of your poetic talent, dear poet. Wisely written :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you very much.

[Lily Mae]

"I was lead down this path…
by ME!!
Knowing that going back to the beginning
would never be the same
I choose to not move a muscle
until the sunrise comes
to show me forgiveness
and my road to salvation.

This is going to be my daily mantra...xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you hot buns... Xoxo

[Harley (arbiter)]

Nice one. We learn from our mistakes so we have to make them to learn I guess. Great poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

It is true that failures lead to success... and it helps us appreciate the victories as well. The balance of life is a fine one.

[The Analog Kid]

Very cleverly done, Dale. Much widom about our choices.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Amen brother... thank you.

[The Analog Kid]

YW...anytime!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I agree with Ed, but it's needed... to fall down in dark, to see reborn new bright light, and you are not in a well state I feel you my friend, what's going on in your precious mind lately.

I admire this write, it's strong, fulfilled with wisdom, and inner strenght, though.
You will get there sooner than you probably know by now.
Always with you! and take care,

E.L.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you beautelisa for your thoughts... I think as all people sometimes we wrestle with our mortality and what we have done with our lives.

True, Dale, but I know you will smile soon :) I just know....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh I am smiling sweetie, thank you... just a little philosophical at the moment :)

Well that's only good, instead of all a*s and stinky on your page... you get wise one day :P