Out Of Sight, Out Of Mind

A natural human fear?

 

If I disappeared today

Would you remember me tomorrow?

Being a grain of sand

Upon this big rock

It is hard not to feel like

Dust in the wind sometimes.

Once carried away by the wind

There lies a clean slate

Made of elephants ivory

While I become a permanent resident

On the land of the lost.

Out of sight, out of mind

Like a ghost that had been exorcised.

From your mind.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

A philosopher wrote something of this sort, 'tis in every man to create his own immortality', surely that means we must keep relationships safe else we end up alone in life and forgotten in death. A terrible thought but logical. Your sad but wonderfully put words are well worth remembering, Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much classy lady... it is hard not to think this was sometimes.

[Emerald Seas]

Great writing! As Muse says "a depressing thought" but it is a reality for some that have lost in a relationship that has gone south. Such an awful feeling to be left wondering if you mattered to that person you have such feelings for...
wonderfully expressed writing!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yes it is an awful thought, but as a human it seems to happen sometimes.

[Muse]

This is a depressing thought....surely we are more than dust in the wind?

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I know it is... it is hard to feel like this sometimes.

[Brittany]

Don't we all want to be somebody to someone? Well said. I like the word choices and imagery and line length. Well done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[ChaoticSoul]

This piece is just oozing with fantastic imagery. It paints a wonderful, retrospective picture of how we're all just one person in a sea of billions, yet we leave such a permanent mark upon lives. I really enjoyed reading this!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks, I appreciate your thoughts.

[Laura Maidah]

The ghost line is haunting and melodic. Really fabulous.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you.

[Lily Mae]

A powerful write.. I've often wondered that.. I hope that somewhere, sometime, I touched someone in a way that they would feel my absence and have fond memories of what once was.. but it wouldn't be you lol...xo You'd say who was that chick? lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I second your sentiment pokey. The only thing is we will never really know ourselves.

[Lily Mae]

I will.. I will haunt you until I find out

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I believe that cause I could never forget you.

[A. V. Madison]

Those first two lines are so perfect, Dale. "If I disapeared today/would you remember me tomorrow?"

This poem is short, sweet, and is going in my library. Bravo for your brilliancy.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much... just getting out a fear of mine. Glad to see I am not alone in this.