Respected You!

...for all those who deserve this!

I'm stabbing myself in the chest

 

 

 

 

 

-Exhausted-

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And every time I close my eyes

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I see you smile

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm dying- screaming

 

 

 

 

You’re smiling!

 

 

 

...

 

You ripped me off

 

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You raped my soul - In front of my eyes-

 

 

 

 

I let you – always!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

~Oh~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I respect you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't want this

 

 

 

 

I want revenge

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I hate you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Yes I hate you all!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But I don't know,

 

 

 

 

 

What the '____' is wrong with me?!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

The whole smile after a frontal stab. That hurts more than a back stab. When they stab you in the back, there is still a distinctive fear or guilt on not doing it in your face. Stabbing you in front and smiling, that can kill.

This is a good format, rarely to never used. You give the reader time to digest each line before the next comes along.

Well painted words.

A very good piece

[shadadakiya]

WOW you really scared me at first someone really pissed you off sorry about that sweety im just glad your ok some people are just jerks

[Jofer Serapio]

This one was interesting. It was like you were letting me in your mind, as an observer, while you droned on with yourself, exploring your intimate thoughts. I love honest writes, the same pieces that explores themselves and let me, as the third party, review and view what you have to say. I write stuff like that at times. It feels like it just comes naturally. In your case, it was very enthralling. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work and send me more read requests. Always a pleasure. =P

[Travis Lawrence]

Hmmm, very interesting line spacing. Like an absent minded thought stream. The demand for self-satisfaction paired with the self-loathing makes for an interesting contraction inside these thoughts. One line that really stood out to me, and I'm not even sure whether it's in a good way or a bad way, I'm sort of indifferent.

"You raped my soul - In front of my eyes-"

At first I didn't care for it at all, but I really am not sure anymore, because the more I read the poem, the more this line seems like it fits. But yeah, still not entirely sure I'd use "rape". Up to you though.

-Travis

[EliJoLee]

wow.
very powerful.
intense.
i luv the format.
made me want to read more and more and re-read.
very good write.
swellsome! (swell and awesome) haha

[poddar kushal]

it is like a wave that your emotion is. it carries me and send me capsized on a island

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Reminds me of a past friendship I had. Powerful, vivid write.

[Robert Luna]

Very powerfully vivid. The scene this paints in my mind's eye come across with such an wonderful clarity. Felt as if I was watching a graphic novel come to life there in front of me a battle for a life. Something pure and truthful but to the point of feeling almost overwhelmed by all that is to be faced.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Pleiades]

This was exceedingly intense. One of those which stops you from breathing for a minute! Excellent capturing of the moment.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Damn!!! This one is really good..
Full of rage, anger and emotions..
I actually liked this write!!! :)

[Lena Vanelslander]

Either you're in love with someone, either you live and feel emotions! Awesome write, love the structure, the build up - everything!