The blues of the sky...

life.deeds.actions.fear.NEED.

…and she’s still waiting.

Looking still at it; there lies in her baby

Calm and silent

She’s waiting; scared.

Sitting on the top of the world, soaring-

Deep in the abyss of thoughts, she fears.

Looking up at the near sky, she begs

Mercy…

Her deeds, her cruel deeds, she admits:

“But death, sometimes, is the need for life”

She again looks at it, it’s silent.

Waiting for it to be hatched;

But suddenly-

She swoops down to fetch

Lunch; prey-

For herself and for the young eaglet:

If comes…

Author's Note

well..the muse is an eagle...around the end of January 2004...there used to be a really large powerhouse, the boundary wall of which started..just two houses next to mine...and...there were eagles all the time...up in the sky...they lived there...on electric towers......so one evening i was looking at them..and perhaps that very night (or a day after, don't really remember :s )...i thought of this and wrote it. :)

Reviews

[KayOss]

The eagle is such a powerful and majestic figure that it's no wonder that this noble creature would be celebrated in poetry. You certainly have managed to capture that here. However, it's not always all good, and that certainly is captured here. I love the mixture of the good and the not-so-good. The feelings of penance and hope are skillfully captured.

The line you highlighted really struck me. It stood out so much so that even as I write this review, those words turn in my mind. I wish I'd thought of them to use! All in all, you've got a good piece here.

There's only one thing I would caution. Be careful with unclear references such as "it." It can throw the reader for a loop, as the reader has to pause and figure out what you're referring to. That has the potential for distraction; with the way your poem flows (beautifully, by the way), that would be very bad. This is still a wonderful poem and was skillfully crafted.

[Pleiades]

I like how you left this open to some interpretation. It is majestic indeed and the simplicity in the words makes all that much more gripping. Very nice!

[Natalie C]

"But death, sometimes, is the need for life"

What a thought provoking sentence
Nicely done, I loved how you described the whole event as it unfolds right before our eyes.

Only thing that got me was your ending, sorry my mind must be on holiday today, 'cause I cannot figure that one out.
But overall wonderful piece

[Travis Lawrence]

"But death, sometimes, is the need for life"

What a philosophical proposition. I love contemplating this statement. Great imagery and personofication. I don't much care for the over punctuation at the end, the semi-colons, dashes and colons. And "If comes..." confuses me. I wonder how that line ends? Perhaps this was your purpose? Again, great write, thanks for sharing!

-Travis

[poddar kushal]

it is deadly. it plunders my sense with its intense tapestry. it is god. it creats a world of its own...

[Lena Vanelslander]

Great poem - you need to let it sip it through to capture it's meaning, the message is briljant though ;)

Wonderfully written.

You have very good use of words and form. The rhythm and choice of words helps impart the message and imagery well. Good use of the underline as well.

A good piece

[Robert Luna]

Very intense imagery. This I think could be applied to other part of life itself. As we all have felt fear and the uncertainty of the many facets of life. We hold the world in our hands at some point in our lives and as well learn and grow the control we had is gone as we are told what to think and how we should feel and believe.

Very Enjoyable!!!!!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I'm not much for the title then continuing in the piece, but this was wonderfully written and i enjoyed it.

[Irfan Shah]

Your imagination is as good as your creativity. Wonderful idea.

The suspense was good. And the line 'But death, sometimes, is the need for life" is such a great idea. Somehow the line reminds me of the Darwinian notion of 'Survival of the fittest'.

No Suggestions really as its perfect although I did try to find a fault ;). Well done!