Flakes of life.

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Unremitting steps
I chose it all, forever
Wasted away always-
I felt that could be
What it had to be
Unchanged.
Forcing myself to make it up
Endeavoring again and again
And again
Wasted away always-
Always
Chasing it, for miles so long
I found,
It’s all over.
Couldn’t make it out,
It’s over.

Reviews

[T. R. Writer]

This embodies so many different desires and dreams chased into one that it's amazing.

[PhoeniX]

that was sad. an end, giving up...something im struggling with

[KayOss]

Hauntingly beautiful. Such a melancholy voice here. This appeals to me. There was a period where I wrote nothing but "dark" poetry. This poem speaks to that part of me. I believe firmly in balance. What I was lacking then was light. I have found some light, but the darkness within will never truly dissipate. I am learning to live with that, as should we all. I have to agree with EliJoLee about the best lines of this poem. Wonderful stuff.

[EliJoLee]

I chose it all, forever
Wasted away always-
I felt that could be
What it had to be
Unchanged.

Love this part. so deep and the whole so sad. specially the end but its a great write.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Chasing it, for miles so long
I found,
It's all over.
Couldn't make it out,
It's over."-Quite sad but it's true too!
And I think so that's the reason for which readers could relate themselves with the writing, if it includes reality and aspects like that...
So, Thats why I liked this piece a lot and indeed its a great write :)

[!!..Love..!!]

I found this piece a very mature piece...
True and deep, Beautifully penned! ^_^

[Travis Lawrence]

So vague, here, but at the same time easily relatable. Who doesn't have something they are chasing, for miles, never to have. I like it.

Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it! Send me read requests whenever.

Have a nice day!

-Travis

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This leaves me feeling rather sad - a desolate feeling consumes me now...whatever the narrator is trying to escape seems futile in this writing. Powerful words. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[poddar kushal]

chose it all, forever
Wasted away always-
I felt that could be
What it had to be
Unchanged.-- this is a beautifully crafted thread of lines qualifying your unremitting steps