i am SCARED.

life.death.beyond...

my eyes are closed

and i can see it in,

i'm a dream to myself.

waking

dreaming

~

i can see it in.

i'm scared

dreaming my being alive

don't wake me up

please..don't!

i'm scared

i'll cry.

don't wake me up!

i'll cry...

 

who am i?

what is life?

i am scared.

i am scared.

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

I like this, it's like a child's voice, but has the awareness of someone with ultra perception, a lucid dreamer perhaps. Interesting piece.

[T. R. Writer]

I think sometimes we all feel this way, it is just very interesting how you choose to express this collective existential feeling of fear and anxiety.

[KayOss]

I know what it's like, to have your life be so bad that you live for your dreams... That you wake up disappointed because your dream is just that- a dream. This can also spark a fear of life. I can relate.

That said, I love the intensity of the emotion within this piece. The repetition only adds to that intensity. Well done. You pose some questions that most of us have, at some time in our lives, contemplated. I am afraid that we may never discover those answers.

Living in a dream world or living for your dreams is not really living. Eventually, we all have to wake up and face the big, scary world. Fortunately, we can return to our dreams at night. :)

[Joseph - Michael]

Somehow, it reminded me of the old saying; "Life is only a dream until you wake up"

On the other hand, it's a real good writing and I enjoyed it, so it's all good...

[Kasey Klein]

An interesting voice expressing the existential angst of the cognitive mind.

[jen -- JG]

this reminds me of being in a sort of half life, both real but at the same time unreal and not knowing exactly wich one is the real one, Asleep - awake both worlds can be good and I like the idea of 'don't wake me in this context - one part feels safe - the other so .. scary.

one foot in the dream world - one foot in reality. and reality asks the questions
who am i? what is life? ---------- the bald double statement I am scared I am scared - indicates to me an awakening knowledge but that in itself is scary.

Pretty good overall - keep writing

Jen-JG

[PhoeniX]

to be honest, this was not one of your best. it was too blunt as i read through it. if you put more description and expression to it, then it would turn out better. good job though

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is a very vivid piece and you imparted that scary feeling in it very well...
This is exactly what a person feels while he/she was scared...
Closing eyes...crying inside....dreaming...waking up...lost inside ....

I liked the starting of the piece very much though..
A great read overall :)

[Collette]

Ahh, the essence of humanity and mortality. I think everyone has asked themselves these questions at least once in their lifetime:
who am i?

what is life?

i am scared.

You did a nice job with this. In it's simplicity, you made it even more real. The essence in this poem was undeniable. Thanks for sharing, and keep the review requests coming!

[Dave Lounsbury]

cool piece. I liked the repetition. We usually repeat things to oursleves during an inner monologue.
It made the piece feel more natural, better flow.