First of all: condolences, I'm really sorry for your loss :(
The poem is great, full of pathos and VERY vivid images, they're spread all over the poem. I enjoyed also the metrica, people usually write quatrains or octave, not many write pentastichs, original :)
Thank you. I just reread this. It's been so long - I probably shouldn't have. It's funny. People say.. read moreThank you. I just reread this. It's been so long - I probably shouldn't have. It's funny. People say over time, it gets easier. But it seems that it just gets harder, over time - missing him.
12 Years Ago
My sister committed suicide in march. I still feel her loss, and sometimes I wake up thinking she is.. read moreMy sister committed suicide in march. I still feel her loss, and sometimes I wake up thinking she is there still.
12 Years Ago
I am so sorry that you had to loose your sister. Especially that way. I don't know which is worse, a.. read moreI am so sorry that you had to loose your sister. Especially that way. I don't know which is worse, and I believe they are probably the same, having someone take their own life, or a disease like cancer stealing them away.
But I do know the feeling of thinking they are still here. It's a good, but also terribly sad feeling to have.
First of all: condolences, I'm really sorry for your loss :(
The poem is great, full of pathos and VERY vivid images, they're spread all over the poem. I enjoyed also the metrica, people usually write quatrains or octave, not many write pentastichs, original :)
Very emotional. I'm sorry about your uncle.
You created very vivid images without using basically any adjectives which I love. Comparing influence to ripples, yourself to the river, time to the water's flow, flowers to your uncle... all very clever and sentimental
The last stanza finished the piece so perfectly and made it all the most sad for me, as the reader. Great use of symbolism to convey all that you have lost. Very nicely written.
This is so sad and emotional write.
I like the way you expressed your feelings and i like your imagery, i'm sorry for your uncle, i lost my both grandpas too, so at least i can sympathize with you.
Going to my library! Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D
A sad and beautiful poem. Your Uncle must of been a good man. People who show us the proper ways need to be part of us always. I'm sorry for your lost. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote