Crush

The familiar toss of hair,

Silvery laughter in the air,

Someone's smitten--

I'm sure.

Eyelashes aflutter,

I'm beginning to stutter.

Trying to play it cool,

but it's hard when he's SO cute!

Author's Note

It's just a *tad* cutesy! Sorry.

:)

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

Cutsey Works, and this poem for it to be one of your earlier works is indeed Showing a natural Talent. You are a natural, and From This piece on Page ten to the poem s on page one, I see a Significant Adept maturity to your work. Wonderful Job!

[devon]

Hahaha! Yes, one of my much older works! It's almost like having your parents show your date photos of your younger self naked, in the bathtub! A bit embarrassing, but thank you for kind words!

[Jordan's Back]

lol Naked in the tub Nah his isnt that embarrassing maybe hand caught in the cookie jar lol :P

[devon]

Hahaha! Feels a bit like on the level of being naked as a jaybird in the tub!

[Jordan's Back]

If you say so :P

[Dean Kuch®]

I thought this was nice. Reminded me of my first kiss so long, looooooooooooong ago. lol!

[Sibt-e-Hussain]

the last line is very much cute and true.. i really mean it. I would say bravo for expressing this behavior in extremely cute manners.

[Cathy Wattam]

I'm sure we've all been there. I know I have. Though my eyelashes don't quite flutter as well these days. Short and definitely sweet.

[devon]

Thanks, all of you!

I appreciate the reviews more than you'll ever know, doves.

[Chip]

Its nice! I really like "Eyelashes aflutter, I'm beginning to shutter" :) Really good! I like the rhyming scheme.

[FJ Davis]

Light and smartly-styled!
It has been my experience that most women--especially, attractive women--hide their nervousness, very well. Of course, I may just have never been "cute" enough to fluster them.
Polished offering, Devon.

[just is]

This is so wonderful, I really enjoyed this piece.
Very nicely written.

[Forbidden Poet]

Definitely a cute and charming write. This is a very heartfelt piece. The flow and rhythm is well done.

[DreamWeaver 2154]

for such a short poem it expresses a lot :) Never felt that way for anyone though I hope the day comes :) Excellent, albeit short read :D