Life's Broken and Battered Things

Deepest dismay, steel cage of gray,

Its touch resonating ice in your bones,

And colder yet to the heart of the dreamer,

Wrapping lifeless arms around

Visions of gold.

 

The brutality that is reality,

Its bite to the flesh of the poet’s tongue -

Not an existence in this world meaner

Than the sinking of its teeth

To the soul.

Author's Note

Want to see what you interpret this to be about, though what I was aiming for is sitting right in front of you. Also, I couldn't really think of a name for this poem, so I was wondering if anyone could help me come up with a better one?

:)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem my Poet friend. The word are direct and asked questions.
"The brutality that is reality,
Its bite to the flesh of the poet’s tongue -"
Reality can slow us down. We can't allow the rules to make us weak to slow us down. Be fearless and brave in life and in dreams. A very good poem. You made me think again.
Coyote

[devon]

Thank you! I'm glad I could make you think. :)

[MandaBear]

Nice job! Great write! I like the title as is! 100%

[devon]

Thank you :) And I think I will leave the title alone!

[de_maruf]

nice

[devon]

Thanks!

[Laura Maidah]

brutality that is reality

Maybe it doesn't sound right if it chimes. "Brutal" is the reality of who? The poet?

[devon]

I'm meaning that reality is brutal. "The brutality that is reality" is meaning just that. And a poem does not always reflect the poet's actual thoughts. While I do think reality can be and is often brutal, I don't think that is always the case.

Thank you for your read and write :)

[Jordan's Back]

This is to me the desire to want to lyrically Challenge all the broken schemes of things, only to find ourselves repressed by that which we do,. Great write.

[devon]

Thank you! And great interpretation!

[Annabelle Lee]

very dreamy, as if driftimg through the mist. A bit spooky,too

[devon]

Thank you reading and reviewing!

[kublakhan27]

Well like any great poem, I think this one can go a lot of different ways...it's a thinker for sure...well done :)

[devon]

Thank you! :)

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[N!LoC]

you dream about things ...but reality comes around and puts u in place? that's just my guess... am i close?

[devon]

That's basically it! :)