Sleepy Calculations

2 A.M.

Cold, uncovered feet.

Unoccupied bed sheets.

Tired eyes are resisting sleep.

But insomnia slaughtered all the sheep,

So I count the minutes, instead.

2:01 A.M.

Reviews

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow very very good, so seemingly simple but I can feel our words hold so much depth. I loved this poem very much! Very short yet so well done. It is the perfect length with a great 1st and last line. I also loved this part:

"But insomnia slaughtered all the sheep,
So I count the minutes, instead."

VERY CLEVER!!!! Awesome poem! 100!
God Bless lovely!
~Mickey

[devon]

Thank you!!! :) I am so glad you liked it!

[Lost in Wonderland]

no problem at all:)

[Elizabeth]

This poem is perfect! It is so simple but so well written! I know exactly the feeling!

[devon]

Thank you so much!

[zainul]

Vivid presentation of deep night,
You had been awaiting sleep to come.
Alas! you endured fruitless fight,
Poem brought you a blessing to calm.
100/100

[devon]

Thank you for reading and reviewing! And think you for the awesome rating, too! :)

[zainul]

You deserve everything,lovely poetess.
Hope to read more of your works.

[devon]

Aww, thank you so very much! :) It means a lot! And I hope to have you read more of my work and to be able to read more of your works, too!

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
We have started to read works of each other.
And it will continue.
Until sleep embraces us....

[devon]

:)