I like this tale. A old fashion feel to the words. I like the poetry with a warning and a story. Some people must test life and end up in a bad place. I like the complete poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote
I like this tale. A old fashion feel to the words. I like the poetry with a warning and a story. Some people must test life and end up in a bad place. I like the complete poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote
Beautifully done,Devon. This is like a nursery rhyme from hell lol. I love your use of description and sensory details that paints a raw tone for your audience. I think the only suggestion I have would be to delete the comma after "has" in the third to last line, and let your masterpiece flow stronger. Great job, and thank you for your read request.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Thank you! I'll go fix that little flubber up there :)
Ok, clear the room everybody. We have a genius in our midst. And no, I'm not talking about me (for once).
I can't believe you came up with this with those words!!!! It's like.....WAWRCH!!!!! You know, I've just noticed that I use a lot of made up words in my review....that's a wee bit weird. Oh well. I'll deal with it. Um....oh yes, I was being amazed.
WAWRCH!!!!!
You are one crazy fruit loop!!! (That was a compliment...I think). A crazy, talented fruit loop!!!
Oh - and just so you know - I may hate you right now. Stop being so talented!!! Well, actually don't stop!!! DON'T STOP!!!!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Oh my goodness. You are just a bundle of sunshine, my Lord! Thank you so very much, dear! Though I c.. read moreOh my goodness. You are just a bundle of sunshine, my Lord! Thank you so very much, dear! Though I can't take the HUGE compliment of being a genius, I do thank you very, very much for the other flattery! Holy cow.
:)
12 Years Ago
Was it you I was threatening with a soft plastic ruler the other day? I have one rule and one rule o.. read moreWas it you I was threatening with a soft plastic ruler the other day? I have one rule and one rule only:
IF I SAY YOU'RE A GENIUS THAN YOU ARE A GENIUS!!!!
Well, actually I also have a second rule:
IF I TELL YOU TO MAKE ME PASTA THEN YOU MAKE ME A CAKE!!!!
But not many people follow that one. I think they think that I'm not being serious. Oh well :P :P :P :P :P
Man, what is with me today???!!!!
12 Years Ago
I don't believe I was the one threatened with a plastic ruler! :)
12 Years Ago
Well, considered yourself threatened now. Here, I'll make it official:
IF YOU DO NOT FOLLOW RU.. read moreWell, considered yourself threatened now. Here, I'll make it official:
IF YOU DO NOT FOLLOW RULE NUMBER ONE I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN AND HIT YOU OVER THE HEAD WITH MY SOFT PLASTIC RULER UNTIL YOU BEG FOR MERCY AND/OR ADMIT YOUR A GENIUS AND/OR MAKE ME A CAKE.
-By order of Becca Bishop
Caps makes everything more official :P
12 Years Ago
Okay, okay!
12 Years Ago
:D Good. I'm glad you see it my way ;D
12 Years Ago
Well, what do you expect, when you threaten a person with a ruler?! :)
12 Years Ago
Touche...I'M A SCARY PERSON!!!! YAY!!!! Fear the ruler ;D ;D ;D ;D
....It's really hard to ma.. read moreTouche...I'M A SCARY PERSON!!!! YAY!!!! Fear the ruler ;D ;D ;D ;D
....It's really hard to make a smiley face look evil, have you noticed?
I've always thought that this face looked down right evil: >:D
12 Years Ago
Wonderful! I'm going to use that from now on! It'll by my personal...whatever you call it!! >:D MWAH.. read moreWonderful! I'm going to use that from now on! It'll by my personal...whatever you call it!! >:D MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!
This was so so so incredibly good! And I'm personally pissed that it is not longer. In fact I am so pissed that I am ending this review NOW.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Oh my God. Stop. I seriously think I may just love you! You are too nice, even when you're p-d off (.. read moreOh my God. Stop. I seriously think I may just love you! You are too nice, even when you're p-d off (haha, sorry, can't bring myself to swear)! But seriously. Stop. YOU ARE KILLING ME WITH YOUR KINDNESS.
12 Years Ago
And you with yours :) And its okay. Piss isn't a swear word unless your around my mom. lol
Hahaha, I can't even say the "p" word without turning red, let alone a curse word! I don't know why... read moreHahaha, I can't even say the "p" word without turning red, let alone a curse word! I don't know why. So, I have to use the term "willy" instead, lol.
12 Years Ago
Oh god, lol. I believe we are going to be godd friends, oh coservative one.
12 Years Ago
That's good that you think that, because I see it in the cards, oh-non-conservative-one! :)