Tears Of Peace

A poem about my best friend

Alone I stood wallowing in my self-pity

My tears fell in my sea of hate

Eternal darkness blind in my way

My despair ate at my soul

Doomed to live a life of pain

Destined to live my life of sin

My tears fell into a sea of sorrow

My future was shrouded in darkness

My was life such a bitter hell

Even when in hell it seems

An angel can make an appearance

You came into my life

A shining bright sun

Through my cloud of black

The shining light of your smile

Cleared me a path

The brilliant fire of your soul

Melted the ice on my own

The passion of your mind

Revived my heart

Alive once more

After centuries of death

My heart told me only one thing

It no longer belonged to hate

Nor did it any longer belong to me

My heart was yours then

My heart is yours now

My heart forever yours

I cry when I think of you

Of what you’ve done for me

But these tears are different from then

My tears now fall into my sea of peace

Author's Note

Umm I just want to say hello! And thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like how this piece sort of took on a rolling life of its own...from doubt and pain to an eventual comfort and peace. This is quite a nice (and ambitious) undertaking in such a short work. I find that your voice lends itself well to this type of penning.

Some technical suggestions...perhaps a stanza break midway through, when the emotion changes from doubt to the birthing of peace...? Just a thought.

[Teddy Westley Graham]

Thank you.

Hmm... I think that sounds cool. I might try it.

[Deepak Rana]

Penned perfectly, showing how our life seems empty and we think its the end, but then there is always a ray of light that clears all the darkness. Great peace.

[Ezekiel Silver]

Fantastic poem! I like how vivid you're descriptions are as well as how strong the sense of hope was in this piece. Nice job!

[smilempsn]

That was nicely written.. Specially
'My heart was yours then
My heart is yours now
My heart forever yours'

^-^

[Brave girl]

that's a wonderful peom,very good and have a lot of feelings there good job,she,s lucky to have someone to love so hard and in such pure way