Eulogy

A little something inspired by the pure GREATNESS of: Somewhere it is Midnight-Dawn Jones: The Demon Slayer!

 

 

To think of us as a we,

Would be to think of a past

Oh so deceased.

Of that love so dead to me,

I calmly share this eulogy.

 

Here lies she and me

-the we-

That no longer breathes.

 

She was amazing and loving

Brilliant teacher.

Kind and giving

Immaculate

But most wonderfully imperfect.

Childishly mature.

An up and comer,

Mover and shaker.

Full of hope that spilled from her

and into me.

She was mine;

I was hers.

How proud/fortunate/happy

I was to be

A ‘we’

With someone so special to me

as she.

 

All of a sudden,

Without any warning,

The world exploded

And my heart along with it.

 

She became a different person

With secretive ways and elusive thoughts.

We weren’t friends anymore.

And she didn’t give me much

When she used to give me her all.

Hopelessly deadlocked -

Where we danced before,

Brilliantly free, amongst the clouds;

We were now entangled

Uncomfortably

Regrettably

Falling into

The beginning of our end.

The end of our beginnings.

How sad, how devastatingly sad

To see our eternity, the promise of forever,

the ‘we’,

Turn into and end up being

Just me.

 

Here lies she and I,

-the we-

That didn’t survive.

Reviews

[Dawn Jones]

Beautiful.

See, I am not the only one who has a depth of understanding when it comes to the broken heart. And I am not the only one who has a way with words. Elegant. Regretably beautiful. Exquisitly sad. She and I... the we that did not survive... the we that was never meant to be. Thank you. For saying things I have yet to be able to express due to the nearness of my pain.

[Yvette Shaw]

Falling into
The beginning of our end.
The end of our beginnings.

WOW!!! Such passion and warmth, well done. Well done.

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Wow! I am lost for words this is a really great write, you put such passion in conveying your feeling. You made this a powerful viewing of a Eulogy...the heartbreak and betrayal were very emotinal. Great job!

[Jaeda]

Wow. That last stanza was powerful. Thanks for submitting into my contest.

[Just Charles]

Beautiful poem. Actually, this is one of my favorites on here. It creatively depicts the pros and cons of relationships. Great write!!!

[Shellie]

By god, this is one powerful piece. The title and the context ar perfectly in tune. Its saddening to hear of heartbreak, your tone dictates the emptiness and disappointment you feel. I cant really pick out favourite parts, I really like all of it ! [but... Falling intoThe beginning of our end.The end of our beginnings.How sad, how devastatingly sadTo see our eternity, the promise of forever,the 'we',Turn into and end up beingJust me. Here lies she and I,-the we-That didn't survive.]
but the whole thing is real good!

[Winter McPherson]

This was a fabulous piece. I feel like I'm going through this right now with a friend that I thought would always be there.......such a strange feeling, this. You've captured it here brilliantly!

[BABSIE BEE]

This is a wonderful, cleverly composed piece. I have tears in my eyes as I truly comprehend every word. It is neither nice nor easy at this point of an experience such as this.

So so difficult,
And sad it,s true,
But you have your writing,
To get you through.

Good thing is...YOU will survive.

Take care
Babs xxx

[Collette]

I truly feel that the loss of a relationship is like a death. A complete chapter of your life, open and closed. I really did the eulogy format...nice little twist on the "death"...these lines were sick:

Hopelessly deadlocked -
Where we danced before,
We were now entangled

Loved the imagery that popped into my head as I read over those lines. Tragic and beautiful, I hope this gave you a sense of peace.

[Lady V]

An amazing and beautiful piece. Great imagery and you put the reader into their own past memory of when the we did not last due to whatever reason it may have been. Great piece. I just had to read it over and over so I made sure I did not miss one part.


Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

I like your heartbreaking pieces the most from you. I almost envy your ability to convey them not only so coherently, but with style and creativity!

"The beginning of the end.
How sad, how devastatingly sad
To see our forever, the 'we',
Become just me."

Beautifully written!