If I were She/She were Me

 

If I were she,

she were me

 

I’d look upon her with

Sweet recognition,

Understanding.

I know her well.

How I love her so.

 

She was the very essence of

Confidence

Bordering on

Cockiness.

Oh, I wish I could share with the world:

it was all a front.

 

Underneath it all,

She was

Full of self-doubt.

She didn’t even believe in her own

Beauty.

So very beautiful, inside and out

Beauty so real you could reach out

And touch it.

And didn’t believe in her own

Talent.

So very talented, you could see it

Coming off her,

Surrounding her;

It was her aura. 

Her halo.

Her cross to bear.

I know her

Well.

How I love her so.

 

Underneath it all,

She was precociously complex

Complex simplicity

Organized chaos.

My very own

Walking contradiction. 

Nothing really mattered at all.

So she said.

But it all mattered.

Her tender heart took it all in.

Her sensitivity

That she hid so well

Made her mourn for

Things gone by.

Time gone by.

Opportunities gone by.

People gone by.

She wanted to act like

It didn’t matter, but

I know her well.

How I love her so.

 

She drove me f*****g crazy.

She never knew what she wanted.

Did she want me?

Or was I just her friend?

All apart of being that

Walking contradiction,

I suppose.

 

Underneath it all,

She was the best person I knew.

My very best friend.

She loved me unreasonably,

As I did her. 

So, even though she drove me

F*****g crazy,

Never knew what she wanted,

Didn’t believe in her beauty,

Her talent,

And nothing really mattered,

I would be there for her

By her side.

I would make sure that she

Believed.

I would make sure it

Mattered

I would help her figure out what she

Wanted

(even if it was never me)

I would do my job in her life.

Play my role.

 

I know her better than anyone.

She knew me too.

How I love her so.

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Don't listen to this lady beneath me! It was perfect! I didn't even notice any vulgarity(that may be saying something to my natural love of vulgar words, but anyway), but it is soooooo beautiful D! I love your commitment to someone that may not deserve it(judging from the outside looking in), but you really understand her, which gives you solace to your decision to ride out!

"Underneath it all,
She was precociously complex
Complex simplicity
Organized chaos."

These lines set up perfectly as to how you describe her as a "walking contradiction"(aren't we all). Great piece my love, and I hope to grow up to be a poet just like you one day!!!!

[Jimmy Greenie]

Brilliant! Really good and moving, shows confusion and happiness and sadness and love...

[Shellie]

WHAT vulgarity? Am I blind? I was wonderin what Bridgey was on bout. There isnt any, that I see. I love this, its very very familiar. Did u post tis in my contest maybe? I always review every poem i open except for my contests.
love the way u worded this...
She was precociously complex
Complex simplicity
Organized chaos."

really well done. i think its quite romantic!

[Nix]

Snap, snap, snap?! What was that review about? Blah, forget that, I thought it was strong, heart felt and incredibly honest. I enjoyed the word play and the flow and i look forward to reading more. ~ Nix

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was quite something... to show you love and understand ing for a friend like that is what it is all about... the depths of you feelings you went into showed so much heart... if we could for one day trade place with someone we love so they could see how we see them and vice versa it could do a lot for our self esteem plus we can get a better understanding of why they feel the way they do.

[Charles D. Moorer]

The line "So, even though she drove me F*****g crazy," was perfectly placed. It broke up the natural rythm of the poem to show how frustration can creep into a relationship yet we stay until we can't, until they learn who they are and we leave or are told to leave or because they never learn who they are. The last line is quite telling: She knew me too.How I love her so. The relationship has ended but not the love. Nicely written

[Just Cat]

I really love this poem, its simply beautiful
I especially like the lines:
' She was
Full of self-doubt.
She didn't even believe in her own
Beauty.
So very beautiful, inside and out
Beauty so real you could reach out
And touch it.
And didn't believe in her own
Talent.'
I love the language used, it fits the emotions well.
Very very nicely written. Beautiful is the only word to describe it.
Keep up the amazing work :D

[Brianna Brie]

Really deep write as it delves into the psych. What can I say it moves me almost to the point that it is too painful to even review. Love to see poetry that pulls on emotions.

[Dean's Mommy :)]

this is amazing dear friend. i feel this way about my very best friend. well, except i dont really like her THAT way, but its still love. she is my sister and my best friend that i would never trade anything for. she is amazing and she doesnt even see it. i wish she could see this and think about me. then she would know that i love her and she needs to see the beauty inside herself the way that i do. its wonderful and well written. luv it!! keep on writing, the world will be a dull place without people that share writing with the world. ;)

[passion]

Yo, this was extra dope! Off the strength of the fact that it can speak to a relationship with another or to thine own alter ego, kills it!!
"Underneath it all,She was precociously complexComplex simplicityOrganized chaos.My very ownWalking contradiction...."
First of all, your vocabulary was on time and your presentation? Listen, I don't want to be one of these ramblers who make a review longer than the piece, so...SNAPS, SNAPS, SNAPS and more SNAPS!

[Winter McPherson]

"Oh, I wish I could share with the world:
it was all a front."
Oh the freedom to let the front fall and be completely oneself. This is the one of the greatest freedoms of all. You captured so well here, someone who did not have that as well as your love and commitment to her.