stranded boat

Short and sweet...i hope.

In the middle of the whispers of the sea,

We sit with our eyes locked upon the broken waves.

The moon is out, the lighthouse is bright,

But we are lost in our own sorrowful paradise.

Goodbyes are hard, especially in the midst of our own reflection.

Author's Note

please review and help with any advise!

Reviews

[JanuaryDreamer♥]

very nice poem :)

[Ibreez Shabkhez]

Wonderfully done,but short poems leave a better impact if they rhyme... not that it matters very much.

[TheFemininePad]

I don't see how I would improve upon this great poem. You wrote this very well. It flows very naturally, and the word choices are perfect in my opinion. Sometimes poems are better when they are short. It depends on what you are trying to convey to your reader.

[trainwreck]

The last line was so powerful. It made me start up in my seat. Lovely poem. I have no criticisms at all.