Thoughts on the Moon

Does she look at herself? In her grand liquid mirror?

If the waves were calmer, I suppose she'd see clearer.

It might get lonely, with only stars on both sides.

Together, they're the only light night provides.

But even the stars are sometimes a crowd.

So she uses the darkness, like her brother does clouds.

Reviews

[NicoSuave]

Great way to personify the moon. Good imagery. Interesting application of genders to the sun (male) and moon (female). The comparison between the two, as well as day and night, light and darkness, clouds and stars, creates a great structure and flow.

"Grand liquid mirror" was a wonderful phrase for the ocean. Your rhyming schemes are always solid and consistent.

[CarlyRhymes]

I absolutely love this. Everything about this is... perfect for lack of a word. Very well written. The theme itself is beautiful.

[Taxidermy 101]

How frusturating, to try to see yourself clearly in the waves that you create and make sense of it all while being 200,000 miles away. I know the light delay is only like a second, but still, it's borrowed anyway.

[Sean Allen]

A nice thought, the moon looking at herself in the mirror of the earth's ocean.

[Stephanie]

I can't tell you how much I adore this. The moon is my favorite part of nature, along with the magic, beauty and mystique that go along with the entire night sky. Your imagery is amazing and I like the reference to the Sun as her brother. Love love love this!! :D

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How beautiful to convey the moon as a woman contemplating herself, you captured the essence here, I love that it's not to long, written just enough to say so much . loved it.

[Natalie]

This was amazing. I really liked it. The moon is actually my favorite thing in nature.

[Diego]

Wonderful poem. I love the imagery of the sky you depict with your words. What made you decide to make the Moon a girl and the sun a boy?

[burningbridges]

This was beautiful. I loved the flow of the piece, you worded everything just right. The line "if the waves were calmer, I suppose she'd see clearer" was my favorite, by far.

Overall, this was really amazing.

[Jennifer Marie Theresa ..]

This poem is so serene and tranquil. There is a sense of philosophy and love. There is wonder and so many emotions. I love the flow of it and I am so glad I came across this poem.