After

A response to Versenator Challenge #20, Eve sitting on the shore looking out at the sea

 

After

 

After

After the world had not ended

After God had not picked up His marbles

And walked away from the blue planet

After Adam, the serpent and Eve

Had long given up the Garden,

Had been forced to fend their way

In a world of stunning sunsets,

Miraculous waterfalls

And abundance of all manner,

In a world of famine and drought,

Of wars, alliances and subterfuge,

In a world set to destroy its own life,

After the party to end all parties,

The orgy to end all orgies

After the rainbow followed the storm

After the waves broke on the shore

Like Virginia Woolf meant it to be,

After the waves begat wavelets begat sea foam,

Eve discovered the beauty of the sea,

The feel of the brine and sodden sand

Against her naked flesh,

And was one with its nature

With the whole of our blue, watery planet

Was one with the perfection of herself.

Reviews

[Nihad Dweidary]

Spellbinding notion. I do love the theme of your poem. God, I am enjoying this challenge like no other. I get to see through your eyes- and the eyes of so many Versenators- what beauty lies within each of you as you yourselves consider writing about it. What a treat!

in a world of stunning sunsets,
miraculous waterfalls
and abundance of all manner,

Yes, the words complement the senses, unearth what the heart feels, and what the mind desires when the it is all over, when a different life begins. Eve at the shore reminiscing on the failures and triumphs of man, and absolving her heart within her body at an ocean divine. Thank you for this most wonderful write.

-Nihad

[Matthew Marquis]

This was really terrific and responds quite nicely to the image. Like Randall I thought your extraction of Eve from this image felt very real and imaginative. I expect you will have influenced more poems on the same theme as more people write about this photograph.

[Randall Richard]

very strong write, i love the biblical allusion. great stuff

[T. L. O'Neal]

Nice poem on the beginning. All in all a wonderful piece. T

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David,
Thank you for sharing such a description of the beginning! You did an awesome job, full of revelations reflecting the beauty that was meant to be before...some crucial moments. We can discern both the creation and the fall as well as the time of restoration. I guess you would understand the first book I wrote "1 Ad in www.ThePassionTimes.com". Will get to you on that one.

Cannot quote which lines I like here because I just love the whole poetry you shared with sensitivity and accuracy. Great piece! Another work in my library!

J 317

[Leah Simone]

Wonderful to read how you expanded this photograph to be a symbol of Eve and Earth - finding harmony and peace - after all the evils have evaporated - the beauty of life is exposed - Leah

[Nat Z. Punx]

it is stuff like this that makes me want to give up and just read. thankfully for myself only i'm a stuborn S.O.B. this is timeless, beautiful and unique