Cupid The Liar

A bit of a rhyme, but need to put love in its place

 

Cupid The Liar

 

Cupid’s not an honest guest

whose credit’s good to pay the bill.

In fact too often he’s a pest

who burns my thoughts and leaves me ill.

 

It’s not that love’s a fragrant boor

a trifle short on people skills.

It’s just those lies that fire his core

and leave me weak-kneed to his will

 

No doubt I love a pretty face

and curvy shapes sure draw my eyes,

but love’s boom-boom will lose its pace

as hearts haul back with jaundiced sighs.

 

I’d love to love with glad abandon,

a happy cricket with my song,

but in the end love’s eyes are random,

my chosen loves all lies or wrong

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Heh, so true. "Light" verse indeed, but with a not-so-light message. I enjoyed the humorous voice of this poem, and the well chosen rhymes. Is it just me or do humorous poems do best with rhymes? At any rate, good job.

"jaundiced"
- This word seemed to break up the flow of the poem. It might just be me though.

- Tiger

[Bubo]

Cupid often makes the most terrible mistakes, what our heart feels often outways the head!

Great write...........



I'd love to love with glad abandon,

a happy cricket with my song,

but in the end love's eyes are random,

my chosen loves all lies or wrong


One day cupid will get it right!!

[Gandré]

This is a classical poem, nice flow, cute good message, very intertaining and sweet.

[Wanda Philipps]

Oh, what a feeling I can still feel the ache in my heart and almost smell all those familiar things that was in and around us while in our relationship. This is a good poem. YOU hit the nail on the head. That is what it felt like when it was all wrong but it looked all right. Good job.

[Ed Rector]

wow, it seems like you have captured the cupid that i know and don't really care for... great job on the piece and creating something me, and i am sure others, can relate to.

[Barry S. Maltese]

LoL - Cupid has never gotten it right. Talk about leaving you ill and heartbroken, been there - done that! Cupid has a very sadistic sense of humor. He played with my heart for many years before I got lucky enough to find someone. Great writing. You hit the nail on the head with this one - or should I say the arrow through the heart.

[Krystal Waters]

Wow David! This is really a nice poem. I love the picture and the wording. Cupid... auggg Doesn't he always hit you when least expected!? Really a nice poem.





Kristine