The Nest

Adolescence among birds?

 

The Nest

 

Limited space

time narrowing

mouth twisting in disgust

bellow of outrage

all efforts at definition

to force the letting go

preparing for flight.

 

The nest’s twigs

are well-shaped now,

worn smooth by wear

well adorned with memories

and fresh paint,

straining with weight

straining with sturm und drung.

 

As the storms of summer clear

and sun rays

backlight the inner nest

a promise of roomier times

of loneliness

peeks through the wrappings

of its wrinkled, aching package.

 

Wary of crashing shuttles

and hijacked dreams

no one tears the paper

to squint into next season

the nest will wait

waving in the shifting breeze

held fast to strong limbs.

 

 

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

You have dragged me over the line by the heartstrings with this one.
I am in "empty nest mode.........
Our oldest just went back down south to begin her Sophmore year.
She walked into housing crisis...lost her bankcard..etc...etc..her roomates mother called me in hysterics ...asking what I was going to do about it ?? Could I please call and complain to the Dean of Housing. I said, "I" ...am going to do nothing...I trust my daughter will work it out...I trust my training...and my God. She just had nothing to say.The girls worked everything out on their own.
I believe as parents...we should constantly be in the process of working ourselves out of a job".
Our heart is never far...but our counsel will show up in the results.

The last 2 paragraphs say it all............ '''sigh''''

you sent me to the dictionary/encyclopedia for the 2nd time with " sturm and drung"
...rfering to the Game....or dynasty ?

love this ... even the length of verses ...rather power up & down with sorrow ...and strength

Blessssssssssssssss ( Fav)

[Antony]

Hey David a well expressed piece of sadness and the coming loneliness we feel as our children are no longer under our roofs and we become empty nesters. It has been a year for me. Well done David.
Tony

[Angela Talbert]

Ok, first let me say I usually do not take the time to kind of edit anything that I read because number one-I do not want to offend and number two I farankly do not feel some of the work is worth it. However, I find this piece to be truly amazing-it has publish quality. I have two small suggestions- in the first paragraph (mouth twisting look of disgust -could be - twisted look of disgust)-or anything a bit shorter with the same meaning-the original line is just a bit to long and it distracts from the flow of the poem. Lastly, (by and if) in the second verse could be left out-they too interrupt the flow. I love this one David, great job:)