The Nest

Adolescence among birds?

 

The Nest

 

Limited space

time narrowing

mouth twisting in disgust

bellow of outrage

all efforts at definition

to force the letting go

preparing for flight.

 

The nest’s twigs

are well-shaped now,

worn smooth by wear

well adorned with memories

and fresh paint,

straining with weight

straining with sturm und drung.

 

As the storms of summer clear

and sun rays

backlight the inner nest

a promise of roomier times

of loneliness

peeks through the wrappings

of its wrinkled, aching package.

 

Wary of crashing shuttles

and hijacked dreams

no one tears the paper

to squint into next season

the nest will wait

waving in the shifting breeze

held fast to strong limbs.

 

 

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

You have dragged me over the line by the heartstrings with this one.
I am in "empty nest mode.........
Our oldest just went back down south to begin her Sophmore year.
She walked into housing crisis...lost her bankcard..etc...etc..her roomates mother called me in hysterics ...asking what I was going to do about it ?? Could I please call and complain to the Dean of Housing. I said, "I" ...am going to do nothing...I trust my daughter will work it out...I trust my training...and my God. She just had nothing to say.The girls worked everything out on their own.
I believe as parents...we should constantly be in the process of working ourselves out of a job".
Our heart is never far...but our counsel will show up in the results.

The last 2 paragraphs say it all............ '''sigh''''

you sent me to the dictionary/encyclopedia for the 2nd time with " sturm and drung"
...rfering to the Game....or dynasty ?

love this ... even the length of verses ...rather power up & down with sorrow ...and strength

Blessssssssssssssss ( Fav)

[Gary H]

As I have a bird's nest outside my bedroom in the guttering I took this as a literal reading. Thought this really flowed well and liked the warnings at the end of student life not always leading to great things - you can always check out your parents - they are still alive - interesting as I don't believe that birds go visiting their parents once they leave home (I'm no expert though)

Very enjoyable.

[Barry S. Maltese]

With two out of three kids out pursuing their own dreams, I can feel from where this one is coming. Setting off to stake your own claim in this world can be very scarey for both the parents and the kids. You tell those feelings very well.
Good work.

[C. Harter Amos]

You describe the turmoil really well of dealing with teenagers leaving the nest. Do you suppose bird parents go through as much angst as we do? Really well written as all of your work is. - Mimi.

[T. L. O'Neal]

This was a wonderful read and I enjoyed the bird nest analogy that you used. When they grow up and fly away it sure makes for a quiet and lonely nest. T

[J.P. Bristow]

Oh thank-you for sharing....though I am not a fan of the blue font I am such a fan of your work!!!!..........my favorite line was ...``mouth twisting in disgust``......great imagery and walks that tight rope...you do so well of dark and light!!!

[Otto L.n. Pipgras]

I really liked the 'sturm und drung' stanza. those words really helped to add a sense of the headaches and stressful sessions that arise in the nest. This leaves me with split feelings of both relief and joy on the one hand and emptiness and reflection of memories on the other. It balances out well. solid wording. enjoyed.

[Gandré]

oh DAaavid! you really got me with this one. you always write such a perfectionized sentimentality. i am falling for it. you show yourself a wizzart at juggling action you create a stillstand ofdevelopment, is like "hanging there". I loved that. I am so glad that you write again! you maintaining the momentum and you give it status quo and sparkle of both! you write about your daughter and leaving slowly slowly..her nest.

[Siege Powell]

i liked this because it reminded me both of a nest and a house, i mean perhaps because i just moved out of my parents place haha, but the tone could go either way. I really do enjoy your writing style! Great job!!!

[Self-esteem]

Your good...that was good..I felt kinda sad!


Wary of crashing shuttles
and hijacked dreams
no one tears the paper
to squint into next season...This verse was excellent....DAMN!