Sunset Explodes Into Morning

A photo Challenge (Versenator #21) between me and Kate B

 

Sunset Explodes Into Morning

 

Sunset explodes

lemons and tangerines

before the slate blue sky turns navy.

The battle between day and night

reflects on wrinkled water,

colors splashed on the waves’ furrowed brow

in contemplation of the night.

 

Your eyes are deepest

when the light softens with dusk,

mirrored lenses to the sky,

your inky depths hidden

beneath the sinking sun’s reflection,

leaving me ashore

with a sly promise of something more.

 

In the dark small hours of night,

As crickets chirp

with knees in frantic motion

their songs of love reborn,

as the air spreads its moist blanket,

I become an alchemist,

transforming wishes into tender love.

 

By morning light,

day winning the latest battle with night,

the crickets’ chorus silenced

and wan wishes turned to dust,

Sol’s harsh light has burned

the Sandman’s last darling dreams

from my star-struck eyes.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Barry S. Maltese]

WELCOME BACK!! I missed reading your work, and written here is a fine example of why! What a lovely contemplative piece. Once again you use visuals and imagry to put your reader right into the picture. I was there. Watching the sunset. The reflections on the moving waters. What a relaxing calming experience. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Welcome home, my friend. You left a small void behind.

[Tessa]

You have conjured some rich imagery here David. The title of the poem, 'Sunset Explodes into Morning' is sudden and beautiful. I am always on the look out for original sea imagery and you have written an awesome stanza,
The battle between day and night
reflects on wrinkled water,
colors splashed on the waves� furrowed brow
in contemplation of the night
Love those last two lines most. THANK YOU for the share, your gift for words. :)

[Lionel Braud]

nature is our emotional mirror, but the line that stuck out for me, the Sandman�s last darling dreams
from my star-struck eyes.

this line here makes this piece not entirely just a nature poem which is great. which to me is that we often exploit nature with our fancies hence becoming our emotional mirror.

[Cari Lynn Vaughn]

It was a very satisfying read. I loved the wording and imagery, they were beautiful. Great job!PS I meant to give this 5 stars!

[Gandré]

Oh David, this turns everything, from orgasms in the sky to logical positivism, into the stuff or dreams...very successful poem. Loved it!!

Your eyes are deepest
when the light softens with dusk, -------this is also true, eyes are deepest when days is gone and the night not yet there...

mirrored lenses to the sky,
your inky depths hidden
beneath the sinking sun�s reflection, ----------how wonderful !

leaving me ashore
with a sly promise of something more. ------------ oh I am in love with your poem!

[C. Harter Amos]

This is filled with beautiful images. The choice of your words was elegant and expressive. Enjoyed the read. - Mimi.

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

David... It seems we took our periods of inactivity at the same time. I just came back from an absence of 2 months today. I decided to drop in and see what you have been doing lately. When I read this I nearly cried for sheer delight.

Words escape me. "Wrinkled water". "Lemons and tangerines".

So long I've been away and now I know why I loved this site so much, because of talented writers like you. This poem is gold, subject to certain publication. The entire tale is told in metaphor; a style that captures the heart and carries it as if by rolling waves.
- Tiger

[Monet Fielding]

Wonderful!

[Gary H]

Hi David, please take Lara's advice re: the esnips recorder. The one you have sadly doesn't seem to work - at least not on this viewing.
The poem and the pictures were excellent. Having said that, just the title made me regard this as a superb piece of work. I learnt something from reading that - if you have something that really captures the aura of the piece in the title then this is going to be a winner.
Loved the colours and the whole piece really captured my attention throughout.
Please write more!

[Gandré]

unfortunately, the audio didn t work. pls go to www.esnips.com
audiocom doesn t work at all. not anymore. it did. great, how you described the moment. i luv it, really. you are't letting something untried what a lyrical beauty in those stanzas. i am glad that you found time to write.
Sol�s harsh light has burned
the Sandman�s last darling dreams
from my star-struck eyes. ------------------ this ending was just perfect, so sentimental. i love u for this. great you are here, dearest.