I want to love you

I want to love you,

like the sun reveals the morning,

like my heart shows its transparency into the core of my soul.
I want to love you,

like the air is peeled off the sky,

leaving me breathless.

I don't need to speak cause when you touch my heart,

you hear how it beats and speaks the silent words.
I want to love you always.

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

What a beautiful poem set on similarities =D Also very enjoyable the oxymoron in the second last verse !
Just one tip, to be gramatically correct you have to put a ' before cause, since it is the abbreviation of "because" (the ' stands for the missing "be")

[Siren]

Passionate but gentle. Unrivaled imagery. Gorgeous piece....Wonderfully written, friend.

[brigid]

what a gloriously poignant poem david. so gentle and yet so powerful. love the imagery thru the words; reveals, transparency,peeled, breathless...so very evocative of love.

[R.G. Bennet]

Great imagery and symbolism. I like the frankness of this poem and the way the speaker seems so dedicated to the object of his love. The one thing I might change is your use of the word "cos" - you'd probably be better off using the proper form ("cause") instead.

Nice poem, otherwise.

[Layla J Omorose]

After I finished reading this the first thing that popped into my head was "awwwww". But this poem definitely has a sense of longing to it. Well done

[Tai Ryens]

This piece has a certain sense of longing to it, a strong desire. I enjoyed this.

[Poetic Beauty]

Wanting is the strong point in this piece. The words are beautiful.

[Buniheart]

Very Sweet :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Love, love and love again! x

[kayla]

This is beautiful. I love it.