Struggles With the Phone

I think that we are on our own
amidst the places we were shown.
Maybe if we find the track
it will lead us safely back.

I think it's time that we admit
we haven't fixed all of our s**t.
The closer that you come to me
the more I'm beginning to see.

And after all the lights go out
we still haven't got a route.
The hardest things in life for me
are the best things once you climb the tree

As you and I conquer the globe
I can't help looking at your robe.
Your skin is lined with shades of gray.
Dear God we need to get away.

Every man struggles alone.
Every person has a phone
and yet we sit alone at night.
Waging a war to face the fight.

So as the fears are closing 'round
I heard you make a screaming sound.
And I'm the one who caused your cry.
I'm not surprised as you say goodbye.
But deep inside I'd rather die.

Reviews

[Brittany Bostic]

I love the rhyme! I also love the topic! Talking about something so seriously that we often don't find as serious. Really like this one!

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Thank you Brittany :) I really appreciate this!

[Riley Justine]

Wow the rhyming scheme is perfect! And this piece flows so well. I also really love how lately your poems are completely up to interpretation. Everyone could get a different message out of this, which I think is super cool. Thanks for blessing us with your poetry :)

[Not here]

Thank you Riley :) I like writing poems like that, because I see how either people interpret them. It's very cool to see. Anyways, I really appreciate it!

[Emily]

Love this!
Well done!
Keep up the great work!!

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Thank you Emily :)

[zaisham9393]

This is relatable to many, I would say.

It reminded me of someone, but anyway I enjoyed reading this.
Thanks for sharing :)!

[Not here]

Thanks :) I'm really glad you liked it.

[zaisham9393]

You are welcome :)!

[H.L. Cerveise]

I love this poem. The flow and the reading of it is easy and meaningful. Your lines, "Your skin is lined with shades of gray" and, "Every man struggles alone" really rang true in my heart and mind. This poem also brought to my mind a song that has been the source of some of my poems and now your writing will remind me of it also. The song is, "My Train of Thoughts" by Kamelot. Thank you for sharing this.

Well done.

[Not here]

Hmm interesting. I'm gonna have to check that out. And I'm glad you liked this :)

[Ana]

You literally have not changed. Your poems still impress me soooo much and even if I don't read poetry your poetry I can sit and read because I LOVE THE RYTHM. Where did you learn to write like this?? Why are you so good??

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Thank you Ana :))) And I just... do it I guess lol. I've never studied poetry and I barely even read any of it. I'm really glad you liked this though!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Good poem, Dante and sadly enough there is much truth in it, we are sometimes alone in a crowd of people. Well done. :) Rudi

[Not here]

Thank you Rudi :) I appreciate it. I'm glad you liked the piece.

[Not here]

Let me know what you think this is about and if you liked it :)