Slice

OncE anD yOu'Re a HeRO

TwiCE AnD yOU'Re JusT bAD

ThriCe You'RE GettInG LooPY

foUR TimEs YoU'rE f*****g mad

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and some logic in the words. I did like this one Dante. Thank you for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

No problem! Thank you for reading it Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Riley Justine]

I was reading the other reviews and I feel weird because I immediately thought murder....? Just me? Probably. Either way I love the simplicity of this poem and the varying size and use of capitalization gives it a chaotic mood, which may have made me think of murder...
But really well written!

[Not here]

Murder was one that I thought people would say, so you're not crazy :) I love all the different ideas here. Thanks for your review!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I saw a person in love that keeps coming back despite heartbreak. Not really understanding why some letters are caps and others arent. Is there a deeper meaning there?

[Not here]

That's an interesting take on it. I used to be a person like that honestly. And I did it because to me and some others it makes the poem seem maniacal or insane, which is what I was trying to get across about the person described.

[Kim]

Nice one, short but good. I like it!!

[Not here]

Thanks a lot Kim :) I'm glad.

[Emily]

I love this!!!
Keep on writing!

[Not here]

Thanks Emily :) I'm glad.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Are we at a party? :)

Reflections on decisions made...
cute way to present them!

[Not here]

Thanks Josie :) That's not what I had in mind, but it certainly could work!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[Stan Lee]

This is true for things like jumping out the window and running away from class. So rebels take note. Think up something different, never do something four times or we'll think you're mad. :)
Nice rhythm and rhyme here Dante. Very catchy!

[Not here]

Thanks smiley face :) I appreciate it.

[firabelle]

Well, I'm glad that you requested to me to read another one of your pieces!

I have to hand it to you; this is one of the more original works on this site, and compared to other sites as well, it's still a quirky standout. Where did it occur to you to change the font? I'm assuming it has something to do with the third line, and how this 'slicer' might be mad. You kept it short enough for the poem to be fun and slightly insane. (I mean this in the best way possible; really, the tone was quite enjoyable.)

I also like how you made the last two letters uncapitalized, almost making those the most sensible words in this whole piece. Was that your intention? I don't know if it was, but I really found that little bit thought-provoking when compared to the rest of the piece.

Also- is there a reason for you using 'mad' twice? The 2nd and 4th line seem a bit repetitive here; it's almost like we're reading the same thing twice, and you mean something completely different each time. Like the first time you mean really angry, and the next time just completely off-their-rocker.

Maybe you just couldn't find another word; I really don't know. But, whatever your intent, I enjoyed the end result, as well as the thoughts that I had afterwards concerning your piece.

[Not here]

the 2nd line is supposed to be 'bad' not 'mad.' I'll fix that ASAP!

And thank you very much for your review :) It was very in-depth. To address your points: I had the idea to change the font because I did it with part of one poem before, and it makes everything feel more insane than otherwise. So I like throwing it in there from time to time. As well, keeping it short leaves the reader with lots of questions, and also gives it the jumpy, schizophrenic-type feel. Yes, it was my intention to make the last two not capitalized, because I was trying to stand those out from the rest of the poem.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for sharing this writing. It made me smile, and the capital letters made me feel like I was riding a roller coaster, but one that is just for my eyes.

Well done.

[Not here]

Awesome H.L. :) Thank you.

[Devious13]

cute and catchy lol , i think that this is unique and fun goood job

[Not here]

Thanks :) I'm glad you liked it. You're the only person yet to have called it cute lol.