Thirty-Two

Forgive me.

You give me

the only thing I love.

Unfold me

then hold me.

You're falling from above.

I'm losing,

I'm choosing

to give up my own breath.

You're moving

and approving

of my burial then death.

The world's cost

is time lost

to be who you want to be.

The dot.com's

are time bombs.

We're drowning in our sea.

Man-made

and world trade

are raining on our heads.

Blood-sprayed

and outweighed,

we're cannibals with beds.

I am

the losing

choice in the war.

We could

be choosing

the keys to our man-made doors.

Author's Note

If you want to personal message me, I'll give you the meaning of this poem to me, but otherwise I keep things a secret. I'll gladly let you know if you personal message me.

Reviews

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Reflections on our world and terrible situations included in it...
Lines and numbers
signs and jumbles
crashing with no resources available to exist.
Our ways are sometimes our failures
"Falling from above"--is there HOPE?

[Not here]

I would say there is :) Thank you for your input!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Good poem, Dante, I love the phrase where you say, that we are cannibals with beds. So true when you read and hear the news about all these cruel things. :) Rudi

[Not here]

Thank you Rudi. That's exactly what I was thinking. I'm glad you liked it.

[Stan Lee]

Wow Dante! This is your best yet! Love your brilliant use of metaphors to communicate a strong and important message. "Dot.coms are time bombs" and "cannibals with beds" That's some amazing writing Dante. Awesome! :)

[Not here]

Thank you smiley face :) I really appreciate it. I'm glad you thought so highly of it.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow! This is such a well written piece.
Enjoyed the flow, vivid imagery and the interesting style where each stanza gives the reader something new to mull over.
Kudos!

[Not here]

thanks Jyoti :) I really appreciate it. I'm glad you liked it so much.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[Emily]

'Blood-sprayed
and outweighed,
we're cannibals with beds.'

I really like this line!
Keep it up!!

[Not here]

thank you Emily :) I'm glad you like it. it's so nice how you review like everybody's poems, and almost all of them.

[Emily]

Thanks Dante!

[Hannah Grace]

I love this! Thank you for sharing with me!

[Not here]

thanks Hannah :) And no problem. I'm just glad you liked it.

[Aphy!]

MY!!!! Man honestly I can never run out of god things to say about your work. That's because you produce nothing but amazing work.
Honestly I loved the simplicity and the rhythm of this poem.
How we're all fighting a never ending battle and we're all in chains which were built by society. How we've all let "man made" objects get the better of us.
That's the vibe I got off here.
Don't know about the title, please elaborate more and why u chose it. I have a feeling it's got great meaning to this lovely poem.
Again, well done man
Aphy xx

[Not here]

Thank you :) I really appreciate it. And I loved your take on the poem. And the title is actually just the number of lines :) Lol. Most poems I write have a big connection to the title, but this one actually wasn't. I love to mix things up though.