Burning Literature for the Cold Illiterate

I lost my life, can I have yours?

The world's gone dark; open some doors.

If all that's right is wrong, we're screwed.

No wonder we're all in bad moods.

I'll never be quite who I see,

and what I wish I'll never be.

The mirror is now my enemy,

so be for me my remedy.

Sometimes we all feel so insane,

we start to shake our very brain.

Our flesh and bones will rot away,

but I'll have you so anyway...

Let's move along, write a new song,

pretend that all that's right is wrong.

And when I cry, don't let me die,

we'll always find the silver sky.

So run with me, let's find a path

and witness all the aftermath.

Human destruction is the game,

and we're all losing just the same.

In the end, we'll entertain

all those drowning in man-made rain.

So let's pretend that in the end,

we'll all just happily transcend.

I lost my life, can I have yours?

My world is bright; let's slam some doors.

Can we pretend that we are all

the saints to whom we all still call?

Reviews

[Aphy!]

"I lost my life, can I have yours?"
Immediately the first line got to me and I wanted to read more (which I did)
Very beautiful poem
Perfect flow and great ease
Keep it up man!
Aphy

[Not here]

thanks Aphy :) I'll try my best. I appreciate your reviews. I'm glad you liked this one.

[Amy R]

absolutely stunning!
i read this over like three times.
perfectly inked!
keep it up :)

[Not here]

thank you very much Amy :) I apprecaite it

[Amy R]

ur welcome! ^.^

[Meraki]

I'm in love with that first line. It's just beautiful and haunting. Great job, overall. It's great.

[Not here]

thank you Meraki :) im thrilled you like it

[andrew mitchell]

i lost my life can i have yours. a top line. well done! terrific writing!

[Not here]

thank you andrew :) i appreciate it

[Stan Lee]

"we'll always find the silver sky." One of the most positive lines I have read in a while! I enjoyed the clear rhythm and easy flowing rhymes. This one is great! I like it. :)

[Not here]

yayyy i gave you something positive for ones :) lol. thanks for the review smiley face im glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A solid write. Had feel of the ancient writers.
"I lost my life, can I have yours?
My world is bright; let's slam some doors.
Can we pretend that we are all
the saints to whom we all still call?"
The above lines. Deep thoughts with many answers. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you coyote :) i really apprecaite it.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Deep thought, Dante. I think you ask some very good questions here. I like the end phrase: Can we pretend that we are all the saints to whom we all still call? Do they answer or react on our calls? Do they or why not. Thanks for sharing this poem. Very well done. :) Rudi

[Not here]

I appreciate your review :) Thanks Rudi

[Emily]

I LOVED that first line!
You knocked this one out of the park!
Keep on writing!

[Not here]

thank you emily :) i will of course keep writing

[Corbin Driver]

I love it! I found myself swaying to a rhythm in the poem. Great work!!

[Not here]

thank you corbin :) thats great

[Davidgeo]

I hate repetitive form but when it's done correctly it can be outstanding. You have succeeded with that here. I am somewhat impressed.

Caught a glimpse of something, like were all just run off in a man made social deluge...

I'm not even in a good mood, I still like it.

Well done koala rapist.... well done.

[Not here]

Thank you sir thank you. I can be your man made social deluge if you would will.

[Davidgeo]

Pass, maybe next time.

[Not here]

Fair enough. My koala is pleased by you.

[Davidgeo]

Good to know.

[Not here]

You ready for the new Indiana Jones movie to come out? I know I am

[Davidgeo]

No. Pass... and they need to stop doing that. If Shia Ladouoche becomes the next Indiana Jones I will drown every koala, kangaroo and wallaby this side of the Mason-Dixon (about 30 animals)..... anyway... stop, no, this is not that place for that. Bad Dante... Bad. Watch this.... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bz3dKqTjZO4

[Not here]

I agree he would be bad at it lol. He pissed off George Lucas in the last movie so he's done. I think they're making one more with Harrison Ford, killing him off, then ending the series.

[Davidgeo]

I love me some Harrison Ford but it's nearing Sean Connery time for him.... go down Harrison, go down.

[Not here]

Agreed. Now, when you have Connery and Ford together (Last Crusade movie), then it gets epic. Even when Connery is flapping his umbrella at birds.

[Davidgeo]

Connery is senile... Ford is close in tow

[Davidgeo]

I might pay more for that fact on screen

[Not here]

true true thats why they keep making movies

[Davidgeo]

Indy survived a danger close nuclear explosion in refrigerator... then later on saw aliens and had a moment with the kid from those s****y Transformer movies.... Senile would be a vast improvement

[Not here]

yeah that's true. at least if you're senile people will pity you or something. or he'll keep making money from action figures. something.

[Davidgeo]

If Brad Pitt had sex with a goat on film he'd win an Oscar and it would be called a breakthrough in cinematography history.

[Davidgeo]

Gilgamesh, he started the name recognition game... f*****g Jesus took that s**t viral.

[Not here]

I hate when the actor's names on the cover are in such large print you can't even see the movie title.

[Davidgeo]

Will you read the "Epic of Gilgamesh"?

[Not here]

It sounds epic. As in long lol. I'll find it somewhere and read it.

[Davidgeo]

It's the epicenter of most religious tales of "whatever".... several thousand years before hand of course. The King James Bible is one of the least original books of all time.... Stolen from something stolen from something borrowed from something supposedly forgotten. (spell check is for p*****s)

[Not here]

Hmm interesting. I actually didn't know that. I'll definitely read that then.

[Davidgeo]

Oooo, that last line is a money line...

[Not here]

Money money money.

[Davidgeo]

You dog... nothing to do with this but, that reminded me of something extremely funny... go here and watch this.... or visit my profile, look at the first video on my stupid profile.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LqAV6zYxjWY

[Not here]

Haha I think I watched that when I first saw your profile actually.

[Davidgeo]

No you did not. You just inspired me to put it up less than small amounts of minutes time ago.
read moreNo you did not. You just inspired me to put it up less than small amounts of minutes time ago.

F**k you.

[Not here]

Really? I've seen that somewhere.... Does anybody else have it up on their page? Maybe I'm imagining things I don't know. It's too late to remember, but I've heard it.

[Not here]

Regardless, I get what you were saying.

[Davidgeo]

Well go fuggin watch it dick clown... it's like, 120 seconds long dick nose. (it's Tuesday, I swear a lot on Tuesdays, f**k you)

[Not here]

you have a pattern? interesting.