Let Me

Maybe you need this.

Could you let me be, for once?

Let me do what I see, for once?

I just want a chance, just once.

Let me go and dance, just once.

When your school is like a jail,

when your alarm clock is a wail,

when you walk behind a veil,

when your life is up for sale...

Let me walk alone, please.

I am nothing but sleaze.

"How can I help?" Just squeeze.

Bury me among trees.

My chest's starting to seize.

I am in a deep freeze.

Nothing in me's at ease.

And still I feel the breeze. 

These

bodies on my windowsill,

letting in the cold chill,

making me stand so still,

losing their bloody spill,

popping yet another pill,

staring at my credit bill,

hoping in some good will,

reaching for my hand drill,

everything is downhill,

hoping for a refill,

climbing silent uphill.

Can I get a restart?

Please will you make me smart?

Seems that I don't have a brain,

so I'll take this drill and find a vein.

Leave me alone.

Leave me alone.

Let me stay right here forever.

Leave me alone.

Leave me alone. 

Leave me alone.

Let me stay here and come back never.

Leave me alone.

Leave me alone.

Leave me alone.

Don't look back at me whenever

you leave me alone.

Leave me alone.

Leave me alone.

Let me drown inside my head.

Let me sink inside my bed.

Let my pillow crush my head.

Leave me alone.

Leave 

me 

alone.

Don't leave me

ALONE

ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE
ALONE

ALONE 

ALONE 

ALONE 

ALONE 

ALONE
ALONEeEeEeEEEeEeEeEeEEEEEeEeeEEeEeEEEeEeEeeEeEee

Come back.

Author's Note

Some people feel better by screaming.
Some people feel better by listening to screams.
Some people don't feel better.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gNbzh_Rbw7A

You push people away because you want them to say "no." You tell them to leave so they will be forceful and stay. You argue because you want to be wrong. You want to be held.
You tell them to go away so they'll come back.
What if they don't?

Reviews

[Amy R]

Greatly inked!
U really have an inner most spark-
that generates wonderful ideas;
keep it up there!

[Not here]

thanks amy :) i get most of my ideas from music i listen to

[Amy R]

well it surely does something gr8!
leaving behind some masterpieces!

[forevermore1218]

Loved this loved all of it wonderful job hon!

[Not here]

thank you very much :) i tried really hard to think of a pun to use for your profile name, but nothing came to mind so oh well. take care

[ANTO]

We test people and they invariably fail the whole barrage of tests - though they might succeed in a few of them, the odds are against us. We become alone becuase we test people not because we want to be alone. We want the perfect person in our life (ourselves).

Love the formatting Dante. As Dan said its a piece of art.

[Not here]

thank you ANTO :) you all here are too nice. i really appreciate your review

[Emily]

I loved it!!
Very well written!
Keep up the great work!

[Not here]

thanks emily :) i always appreciate your reviews.

[Brittany Bostic]

Thinking you want to be left alone and actually being left alone are so different. there are moments when we all wish everyone in the entire world would just leave so we could be alone. But then afterwards when they are done we wonder if that was the best choice. Feeling alone is different. It's pain vs. pain. It's difficult to decide and there really isn't one right choice. Amazing, deep, and dynamic poem. Great write as always

[Not here]

thank you for that review :) it's really in depth and I agree with everything you said. I'm glad we see eye-to-eye on this.

[Stan Lee]

I never tell people to go away so they come back.... If people don't stay when i ask them to, they're the people I shouldn't need in my life anyway.
Remember people who walk out on you - it's like the garbage taking itself out! :)

[Not here]

thats a great way to think of it :) youre so positive lol

[dan]

david, This is f****n' amazing, a work of art. The word play is unparalleled. The rhyme scheme is flawless. Your presentation (how the reader views it) is buttressed by the clever use of different sized fonts, repetition of points of emphasis ("...leave me alone, etc.") outstanding! My only critique? The ending is a bit overblown. I know you wanted emphasis but it just could've been better conveyed. And that's just my opinion: if you're happy with it then leave it alone.
Now my big statement: I believe your writing has outgrown submitting pieces and asking for our opinion. You should be getting published! I tried for years, submitting countless pieces to various literary outlets, online magazines, etc. Never got a nibble in return. My advice for you is to try your F****N' A*S OFF to find someone who will recognize your talent enough to publish your writing.
Your talent far surpasses mine, I'm not ashamed to admit that. I just wish you the best of luck going forward. You're going to make it, david. Thank you for submitting your writes in read requests to me. I'm honored to be a sounding board for you. Good Luck!! take care...dan

[Not here]

thats very nice dan :) i'm really glad you think so. we will see. i'm not sure where i would submit it to or anything, because it's not the traditional type of poety i often find. i'll see what i can do. thanks for the feedback as always :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

Dante, you have crazy talent. I don't think I have ever read anything from you that I didn't like. Every time I read something you write, I literally feel I can relate. This Let Me.... just blew me away. I really hope you keep going with your writing and maybe one day become published. xo Karma

[Not here]

awww thanks :) that means a lot to me. and i hope so too. right now I do have some short stories and a novel published, but no poems or anything. i guess this is just my way of ranting (with the poems)

[FlatLineBeauty]

It is a very good release :)

[Not here]

thank you :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Wow, would be amazing as spoken word with these emotions climbing.

[Not here]

thank you very much Josie :)

[Shae]

Beautiful. Sometimes you just need people to let you be. Nice work.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)