Daddy

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he doesn't have a home,
anywhere to where she'd roam.

She doesn't have a sister;

will never have a special mister.
She used to have a brother;

he died inside her mother.
And although she's very sad
at least she has a dad.

She doesn't know a soul
who would take her home tonight.
She used to have a daddy;
she lost him to a fight.
She doesn't have no money
but she's doing just alright.
She doesn't sleep at all.
It's easier to cry all night.

She doesn't have a job.
She'll never be a wife.
And she knows one of these days
she'll take her f*****g life.
Her tears have filled the ocean;
now she's stretching very thin.
Gorges herself at dinner
just to throw it up again.

She won't ever have a husband
and she knows that'll never change.
She really misses her daddy.
And she has grief past any range.

The only choice that's left

is which weapon she use.

She still has the whip

that her daddy used to her abuse.

Reviews

[Moonlight]

This is such a tragic poem. And the ending just blew mind away. I read the poem thinking that she is a girl who despite having lost everything might be holding onto something the father left but the last two lines changed the entire poem for me.
This is a very emotional write Dante. One that might bring a few of us readers to tears and leave a few with a sad smile on their faces.

Nonetheless, it is a beautiful melancholy that keeps ringing in my ears.

Thanks for the read request. I really appreciate it.

-monlight :)

[Not here]

Thank you Moonlight :) I really appreciate it. This was a tough one to write, but I'm glad you liked it!

[Moonlight]

You're welcome :)

[KittyKatgirl]

Naww this brought tears to my eyes. The ending was so strong and emotional. I never met my biological dad but I do gave a stepdad. You always put me in awe and once again you never cease to amaze me. I am jealous of your talent.

[Not here]

thank you and im really sorry thats sad. but no im nothing special dont be jealous. youre a great author/poet/etc. also.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Mixing of emotions building, mostly, a sad mixture of loss and abuse.
Our world today, makes this happen too often to the female nation.
They have to be thick skinned and powerful to weather the fight here on Earth.

[Not here]

i agree and its very unfair

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

:) Yes! If only we were treated as equals.

[Not here]

im with ya. i mean im a man obviously but i agree with what youre saying

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Glad you agree, even though you are.
:)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This literally brought tears to my eyes. You always put me in awe. xo Karma

[Not here]

i always look forward to your reviews. thank you so much for reading :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

You are very welcome dear :)

[Not here]

:) glad you liked it

[Aly]

This made me cry. I can relate to every line and it explains me well very well written. You posted this on one of my contests and I had to comment.

[Not here]

awwwww. im sorry that you can relate to this. hopefully everything is alright now though. take care Aly.

[Ishita Dixit]

That was some shocking end!
Your sense of rhyming never ceases to impress. This poem is another feather in your cap.
The beginning of your poem reminded of the movie Southpaw.
Anyway, a thoughtful and beautiful write, as always!
Keep going. :)

[Not here]

thank you very much ishita :) im really glad you liked it and i will keep going.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad write. You led the reader to a sad ending. Abuse lead to bad ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you for all the reviews coyote :) i really appreciate them

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Katethepoet]

She doesn't have a job.
She'll never be a wife.
And she knows one of these days
she'll take her f*****g life.
Her tears have filled the ocean;
now she's stretching very thin.
Gorges herself at dinner
just to throw it up again.

She won't ever have a husband
and she knows that'll never change.
She really misses her daddy.
And she has grief past any range.
The only choice that's left
is which weapon she use.
She still has the whip
that her daddy used to her abuse.

These last two lines are striking and just heart wrenching . The feelings behind this are palpable. The rhyme scheme was brilliant towards the end.

[Not here]

thanks kate :) i really appreciate your review. im glad that you liked it

[Stan Lee]

:( more sad stuff Dante...

[Not here]

hey hey hey!!! itll get happier soon, i promise

[Willard Wells]

It is a sad time when someone is broken so bad from growing up in a non-nurturing environment. A sad tale with great imagery and truth. Well done and thanks.

[Not here]

thank you very much willard :)