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You say that I can trust you

but you don't know what that means.

Love is such an easy thing

when you can't even see my screens.

I wear my heart on my sleeve 

and a screen on my chest.

And I'll always have a darker side, 

even if I'm blessed.

I'm lost in my own mind,

and I worry that you'll leave.

If I spend too long in there

you might forget what you believe.

And then your beliefs will change,

and you'll find yourself another man. 

Even if I try my best,

I cannot help but doubt the plan.

Sometimes it's just too dark

for me to ignore my own heart.

And I then begin to see

how all of my life falls apart.

'Cause I had a light inside

but everyday it's cracking more.

And I'll break, fall to the floor,

if you ever slam the door.

I've used up all my words

trying to explain how I feel.

At the end of the day,

I guess I'll let you take the wheel.

'Cause I love you all the same, 

and still my emotions are

tearing us apart

and carving into me a scar.

But I'll hand you my knife

and see if you can save the day.

'Cause I call you my superwoman,

and you are in every way.

I'm a different person

than the one you'll ever see,

but if I'm a hidden treasure chest

you're holding my only key.

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

I love how you portrayed both romance and suffering in this poem. Extremely well written!

[Not here]

thank you :) lol so many reviews from you lately. i feel like i owe you

[Tamika Finley]

I love this! Your talent is beyond words and measures. Thanks for sharing your work here. You inspire me to be a better writer :)

[Not here]

thank you so much tamika :) i really appreciate it. and you're a very good writer. keep up all your fantastic work

[Tamika Finley]

Thank you so much I will.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Whoa! This poem is amazing, it carries darkness and light at the same time.
"And I'll always have a darker side,
even if I'm blessed."
I loved these lines, though I love the whole poem, but this kind of hit me with a blow of emotion and thought. Great job!

[Not here]

thank you very much Alondra :) im glad you liked this

[Corbin Driver]

Great work! Keep up the great work!

[Not here]

thankssss corbin :) glad you liked it

[MissLaine]

Lovely poem you written! :) Powerful, you have a talent in writing poetry! Keep it up!

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[MissLaine]

:) no problem!

[Brittany Bostic]

You have a real gift for poetry. I am only just beginning but it always flows so easily and has such feeling in every line. I love the way you write. And you seem to be in touch with the broken side of your heart. I admire that, most men (sometimes even writers) are afraid of that. The last stanza was absolutely beautiful and fit so well with the rest of the poem…and yet it was the ending line as if the entire thing was to be locked up and hidden away.

[Not here]

thankn you so much brittany :) and yeah i gave up trying to be like most men a long time ago. thanks so much for your kind review

[Rosaliine]

Wow, I can feel a lot of emotions in this poem, some that I can relate to. Keep up the amazing work!

[Not here]

thanks rosealine :) im really glad you liked it

[Moonlight]

This is a great poem Dante.

The honesty of the words is ever present through out the piece. The part where you have linked the image of a broken man to the worth hidden deep within is actually very beautiful. It seems like a fragile line connecting the two sides of the person and even though the power of losing the yet unexplored wealth lies with the woman, which by the way I found to be quite intimidating, it just adds to the depth of your poem.

I liked how the simplicity of the last stanza delivers such a strong tone of finality and yet is not overwhelming the content in general.

Great work! :)

[Not here]

thank you very much moonlight :) these things never seem as deep to me until someone points them out. i just write and enjoy it and try to make it easy to understand. i really appreciate your review

[Moonlight]

You're welcome Dante! I hope you enjoy seeing your poem being seen from different perspectives by different people
..:)

[Not here]

yes i do very much

[Moonlight]

Sounds great! :)

[dan]

david, I believe this is the best writing of yours that I've seen. The tempo and beat of the rhyme is outstanding and the rhyming seem to flow naturally, not forced at all. You should do research to see who would publish this...it's THAT good. I'm saving in my library favorites, thx for that. take care...dan

[Not here]

thank you :) im really glad dan. i hope youre doing well

[Amy R]

marvelous piece !
one of my many favs of urs!
keep writing!
thanks for sharing :)

[Not here]

thank you very much amy :)

[Amy R]

ur welcome!!