Just Perfect

I want a perfect body.

I want a spotless soul.

I want an honest laugh,

and I want to be made whole.

I want to really smile,

without holding to a knife.

I would give away it all

to live a perfect life.

Words are really hard to make into a phrase.

I can't capture them and get me through this maze.

And I detest myself everyday in some ways,

especially at church as I sit on Sundays.

All around me,  it seems like I'm getting praise.

But it never lingers in my heart, and it never stays.

In the next moment, I'm wanting them to raise

me up on their shoulders and hold me there for days.

The things that I feel set my world ablaze.

I can't put out the fire  or cut these charades.

'Cause I'll laugh at their jokes, but if you look at my gaze

inside my eyes you'll find a fire  and a hatred haze.

I want a perfect body.

I want a spotless soul.

I want an honest laugh,

and I want to be made whole.

I want to really smile,

without holding to a knife.

I would give away it all

to live a perfect life.

I want spotless skin, with no marks or bruises.

I want exactly what I want, not what he chooses.

'Cause he's inside me, but he still refuses

to give in to my wishes. It's me he abuses.

He's the dead man I'm mentioned, and he walks alone.

He hacks into my head like a bug into a phone.

Over the years he's grown. He's made me his own.

And now when I come home I fall like a stone...

I want spotless skin, and I know that's greed.

But it's true, no matter. And still I bleed.

Yeah, it leaves some marks and it leaves some stains,

but for a moment it releases me from darkened chains.

Give me perfect features, and I'll ruin them instead.

Give me a great appearance, and it'll all get to my head.

Give me a great body, and I know I'll use it wrong.

Give me a perfect body, and I'll pretend it makes me strong.

Give me perfect features, and I'll ruin them instead. Give me one more minute

Give me a great appearance, and it'll all get to my head. and I'll sing you my song.

Give me a great body, and I know I'll use it wrong. Give me one more moment

Give me a perfect body, and I'll pretend it makes me strong. and I'll sing you my song.

I want a perfect body.

I want a spotless soul.

I want an honest laugh,

and I want to be made whole.

I want to really smile,

without holding to a knife.

I would give away it all

to live a perfect life.

But I'm obsessed.

Reviews

[Brittany Bostic]

Many people try to be perfect, especially teenagers. I think everyone needs to realize that we can't be perfect, we have to be okay with good. I like the admitting that came with the subject. Everyone at some point wishes they were perfect and this is what it feels like.

[Not here]

thank you brittany :) strange coincedence but i have a person with the same name as you over at my house right now. anyways i always appreciate your reviews. theyre very relatable and insightful. :)

[Brittany Bostic]

Oh funny and thanks, I think we often see things in a similar way :)

[Not here]

yes we do :) its awesome. love your background btw. so pretty

[Brittany Bostic]

Thanks I took the picture in Jamaica :)

[Not here]

WHATTTTT i love that country

[Brittany Bostic]

Me too! It's so beautiful there!! I wrote like a half a book in the few days I was there.

[Not here]

WOAHH thats really awesome

[Brittany Bostic]

YEAH! It's super inspirational

[Not here]

awesome :) thts good

[Coyote Poetry]

No true perfection. Just people trying to find some kind of happiness. Seeker of perfection. Learn too late. Perfection is in the eyes of the beholder. Thank you Dante for sharing the powerful poetry. Left a lot for the reader to think about.
Coyote

[Not here]

thanks coyote :) thats what i like to do with my poems

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dante.

[Corbin Driver]

Great poem, I like how it is structured kind of like a song.

[Not here]

yes it is :) thanks

[andrew mitchell]

Lovely work that flowed like a song. Brilliant work just brilliant!

[Not here]

thank you andrew :) if you sent me any read requests ill try to get to them soon

[dan]

david, sometimes after reading your work I sit shaking my head...your talent is so immense it makes me want to be young again and really writing intensely to try to develop MY talent. (I was confused a bit by those two stanzas next to each other?) Your rhythm and rhyming are perfect, you set an even tone and abide by it throughout; it reads so easy and always strikes me as memorable. GREAT piece of writing! take care...dan

[Not here]

yeah sometimes i do that thing with the stanzas by each other when i'm feeling especially hectic or crazed. anyways thank you dan :) i dont always stand by the tone and rhythm so well but i'm glad i did in this one. i really appreciate all of your reviews

[dan]

My pleasure.

[Ana]

So true, isn't it? Another seriously amazing poem; I could read everything you write.

[Not here]

lol thank you ana :) im gald you liked this. i appreciate it

[Tamika Finley]

I love this so much. You rarely disappoint me lol.
I like the way this was written. There's truth behind what you're saying. We long for something, get it and are never truly satisfied. But whatever it is, we hate not having. Then don't appreciate it once we want more. We are greedy creatures.

[Not here]

thank you tamika :) im really glad you liked it. thank you and i agree

[Tamika Finley]

No problem. thanks for sharing with us all :)

[Not here]

thanks for reading :)

[Rosaliine]

Wow, this is amazing! :) keep up the amazing work :)

[Not here]

thank you rosaline :) ill try. i appreciate your review

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Keep it up!!

[Not here]

thank you emily :)

[Willard Wells]

Very nicely done and I love the flow and feel of it. Lots of wild stuff going on in that head of yours. Cool.

[Not here]

yes yes there sure is haha. thank you willard :) glad you liked it