Wintry

They tell me that my life is a memory.

But to me, that's all lies, it seems.

'Cause I'm locked in a cage. Please remember me

when my world fades slowly to dreams.

I'm not quite sure where my life is taking me,

but I hope that it's taking you too.

'Cause no matter how terrible life may be,

I'll be alright as long as I have you.

And this bridge that I walk on is trembling.

Or maybe that's my legs growing weak.

'Cause the death in the air is assembling,

reminding me of the havoc it wreaks.

I've never been much good at the goodbyes,

or seen truth in a liar's eyes.

Though I've never held a girl while she cries,

I've held an old man as he dies.

I've never met a friend on the lonely street.

When I walk, there's just one set of feet.

And I've never had a special place for us to meet,

or felt love under hurricanes of sleet.

And I never returned to the icy pier.

Where I stood and whispered in your ear:

"I don't care that my heart is full of fear.

I wish I could kiss you right here."

We promised that we would always take it slow,

but neither of us could ever know

all the pain and perfection we'd undergo

as we stood together in the snow.

Maybe we can return to the icy pier,

and try to destroy my fear.

But winter comes around again this year,

and I'll whisper again in your ear:

"I have a demon that's deep inside of my soul,

and a darkness that nobody knows.

In my heart, there is still a very painful hole.

Baby, please just never let go.

Please never let go."

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

I love the imagery and emotion in this! Beautiful piece!

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thank you riley :)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Oh my gosh! This is so amazing that I had to read it twice. This poem is very beautiful and seems to reflect even characterization.
Loved these lines especially:
Though I've never held a girl while she cries,
I've held an old man as he dies
Great write!

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thank you alondra :) im really glad you liked it. i appreciate the review very much

[HipsterPrincess17]

Outstanding poem!! I really like the emotion that you expressed in this work of art and I also love the rhyming that you have wonderfully fit into this poem keep up the good work :)

[Not here]

thank you lia :) i always rhyme or try to at least lol

[HipsterPrincess17]

Your Welcome!

[KittyKatgirl]

This is really good Dante. I especially love the last part. I really enjoyed reading this. As usual you once again impress me :)

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thank you crystal :)

[ShadowWhysper]

I really like the rhythm in this piece. Some great lines in here. :-)

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thank you :) glad you liked it

[Emily]

I really like this one!
Keep it up!!

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thank you emily :) i will try

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of emotion expressed in the poetry. Left the reader with visions of desperate need and want. I liked the drive and the energy of the words. You brought the reader and held them to the last words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

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thank you for reading coyote :) i apreciate your review

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dante.

[Tamika Finley]

Love this. Just like your other works I've read, it's abundant with imagery and emotion. Thanks for sharing

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no problem :) glad you liked it

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Wow Dante... That was amazing. I really loved that. That is now one of my many favorites of yours.. Amazing job and keep up the good work my friend!

Love and peace
Tessa Danielle Guise

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thank you tessa :)

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

No problem.. Keep up the great work!! :)

[dan]

david, Not exactly a very Christmassy thing to whisper in a girl's ear, but in the context of the poem it works just fine. I like your rhyming skills, you always manage to keep it tight, same (or very close) numbers of beats/line. The story told by the poem drips love from all areas, that someone special in your life should be very pleased. (A little mistake: In the third stanza, last two lines you write__"'Cause the death in the air is assembling, reminding me of the havoc they wreak." Death is singular, so it should be 'the havoc IT wreaks.' When you are writing something this good, those small blunders can distract the reader from the message and clarity. dv) A really nice piece of writing! take care...dan

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alright thank you dan. ill correct that. and i appreciate your reviews :) glad you enjoyed it. ill keep writing stuff like this as long as im motivated