Nice poem Dante. All the best for you two. I like the part "i'll love you through the fights" No relationship is ever smooth sailing but real love it worth it. Keep smiling :)
Interesting word play, your rhyme and meter schemes are strong and your sentence layout is artistically fun. Your emotional content has never been more evident, seems having someone of interest in your mind brings all kinds of good things out of your mind :~)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
yes i agree with that :) im glad you liked it. thanks for the review bear
A poetic gesture of love, with a format to die for,, :-) Life is all and
All things must be cherries, and somewhere along the way love gets in the mix,, but other times its just a strong mutual understanding.
Your ink marks deep, outstanding piece of poetry..
thanks for sharing, I will read some more"
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you E.G. :) im really glad you liked this piece
david, I don't think that ever before did I read one of your pieces and go, "Awww!" This really tugs on the heart and gives it a slight twist, as if a flourish...I hate to sound like I'm just echoing Jan's thoughts (below) but any love that is also based on strong friendship has a much greater chance of having staying power, a longer lift of mood for both involved. The format used would be better suited to a chaotic type of write, but you still make it work with this one. A very accomplished piece, well done! take care...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you dan :) and thats good. this was written from the heart about a girl in my life right now
A new softer voice, but I think this is going to my library for reread. It's open and honest, uses some internal rhyme, but feels like it's from the heart, not the head. That's the type of poetry that speaks to my emotions and my sappy side. That love that has a strong base in friendship, is the kind with staying power. The willingness tho be vulnerable to another is a gift.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you jaycee :) and id say it came from my heart. more of my recent works have. ill get an idea .. read morethank you jaycee :) and id say it came from my heart. more of my recent works have. ill get an idea for a few lines, and then i just let loose and write.
I find the ones I can write quickly without my head getting to involved--subconscious writing for la.. read moreI find the ones I can write quickly without my head getting to involved--subconscious writing for lack of a better description-- are often my best writes. I think the may bed your best poetry too. I won't compare them to yours stories and boss though. Those are very different, but are gripping in their details.
9 Years Ago
woops i meant to send tht to emily lol. my bad
9 Years Ago
thanks :) and yes i agree that from the heart is more powerful