A Door, A Key, A Day

A Door, A Key, A Day

A Poem by Not here

I just can't cope with this anymore.
I need some hope but you slammed the door.
I need the key but you threw it away.
I need your love that left yesterday.

I want a dream that does not bring fears.
I need a day that does not bring tears.
I hope for a sunset up in the sky
that I can look on without wishing to die.

I fell from cloud nine, landed hard,
hit the ground, shattered in shards.
I woke up in a foreign cage
that barely contained all my rage.

I just can't cope with this anymore.
I need some hope but you slammed the door.
I need the key but you threw it away.
I need your love that left yesterday.

Searching for peace on my knees again,
the glass heart broke and stabbed in my skin.
I want to remember what it feels like to bleed;
I'd rather feel pain than this numbness, I plead.

If the world must break let it land on me.
If the sky does fall, I promise not to flee.
And I realize every selfish doubt
and I think on what life's all about.

I can't even breath when you open the door
and you offer a hand to me down on the floor.
Then you hand me the key, and you whisk me away.
And you give me your love for the happiest day.

© 2015 Not here


Author's Note

Not here
Don't really know how this came to mind, but it did. Hope you enjoy :)

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It appears to be a song lyric, you have a nice refrain and strong verses. It sounds more pop than rock unless you go full metal, the pounding drum beat would set a good tempo :~)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

thank you Bear :) im not sure what it would be. im glad you liked it though lol
Good rhyme and rhythm to this piece. :-)

Question though, is it the same person who slammed the door and took their love away that offered their hand at the end?

Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

yes it was intended to be in my head, but it can be whatever you want it to be. and thank you :)
ShadowWhysper

9 Years Ago

I get it, I just wanted to be sure I was seeing it the way you intended. :-)
Not here

9 Years Ago

its alright :) it can mean whatever you need it to
i love this :) each word seems perfectly placed

Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

thank you very much gabriel :)
Very nice wording!!
Well done!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Not here

9 Years Ago

thank you once again emily :)
Nicely done piece on returned love. Happy endings are nice. Thanks for a well penned piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

thank you willard :) and i need more happy endings in my poems
I did enjoy. It was a great rhyme. I'm not sure that the title couldn't be improved. :) But the poem was very well done. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

the title could probably be improved but im too lazy :) thank you smiley face

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