A Door, A Key, A Day

I just can't cope with this anymore.

I need some hope but you slammed the door.

I need the key but you threw it away.

I need your love that left yesterday.

I want a dream that does not bring fears.

I need a day that does not bring tears.

I hope for a sunset up in the sky

that I can look on without wishing to die.

I fell from cloud nine, landed hard,

hit the ground, shattered in shards.

I woke up in a foreign cage

that barely contained all my rage.

I just can't cope with this anymore.

I need some hope but you slammed the door.

I need the key but you threw it away.

I need your love that left yesterday.

Searching for peace on my knees again,

the glass heart broke and stabbed in my skin.

I want to remember what it feels like to bleed;

I'd rather feel pain than this numbness, I plead.

If the world must break let it land on me.

If the sky does fall, I promise not to flee.

And I realize every selfish doubt

and I think on what life's all about.

I can't even breath when you open the door

and you offer a hand to me down on the floor.

Then you hand me the key, and you whisk me away.

And you give me your love for the happiest day.

Author's Note

Don't really know how this came to mind, but it did. Hope you enjoy :)

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

An excellent piece of poetry makes mine look lame lol thanks Dante :)

[Not here]

lol i dont know about that :) yours is very good. but thank you andrew

[Moonlight]

I like how it changes from grim to gay like midnight to golden.
Beautifully written poem. It starts with this cold feeling that pierces the heart for the pain of the writer can be seen but it turns all fuzzy and warm as we reach the end. I liked this poem a lot. Great work! And thanks for sharing. :)

[Not here]

thank you :) i wrote this while listening to a twenty one pilots song

[pams poems]

thsi is a really swee poem i cant stop reading it

[Not here]

aww :) thank you pam. im really glad you liked it that much

[Amy R]

absolutely loved this poem.
the feelings radiating from it is quite strong!
greatly inked!
thanks for sharing David :)
looking forward to more!

[Not here]

thank you amy :) im glad you liked it

[Amy R]

ur welcome :)

[Tamika Finley]

when it seems as if everything's falling apart and you accept it all and it all comes back; life. love this work

[Not here]

thank you tamika :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Good poem about love and the feeling around it, Dante. Thank you for sharing this writing. :) Rudi

[Not here]

thank you for reading rudi :)

[Corbin Driver]

Great job! Nice piece written here.

[Not here]

thanks corbin :) i see your reviewing some of my work. i really appreciate it. if you send me read requests, i promise ill get to them as soon as i can

[Aphy!]

Beautifully constructed. I actually read it like 3 times because i really loved it. Love ur work man!

[Not here]

thank you very much :) im glad you liked it

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the thoughts leading to the very good ending.
"I can't even breath when you open the door
and you offer a hand to me down on the floor.
Then you hand me the key, and you whisk me away.
And you give me your love for the happiest day."
Above lines can stand alone. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you coyote :) and i always try to end them on a powerful/good note. i appreciate the review

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[JayceeC]

D, you have definitely taken a new road as a poet and it's in a way that makes your reader think. From heart ache and loneliness back to a bright place. The repeated stanza works well here and the fact that it is totally change, but keeps some of its elements for your closing stanza is a technique that has been used my many great writers,because it is effective. I'm glad it's not personal, not all poetry is, but you did a great job of taking us to that low place and then raising us up.

[Not here]

thank you JayceeC :) that means alot coming from you. I appreciate you reviewing lots of work very much. and im glad you think ive progressed

[JayceeC]

You write so much that it is inevitable. Writers who write and review on a regular basis will improve their craft if they are not ignoring advice and edit the work where warranted.

[Not here]

that makes sense. and writings my lifeline somedays, so i just have to

[JayceeC]

Most true writers feel a compulsion to write, it may ebb and then flood, but it tends to be fairly constant.

[Not here]

yeah i agree