Falling Stars

One more time for the rewind,

running away, looking behind.

Watch out for the monster enemy,

lurking nearer to you than you see.

Can't stop it now; can't turn back to

the place you came from. No more you.

It's loneliness in the ungodly flesh.

It's a hometown city turned to mess.

It's a world that's broken, tattered, torn

full of broken people, shattered, worn.

Lost all hope, no longer bright,

but now we realize in the dark of the night...

Maybe all we have is lost tonight...

Maybe all we had left was one fight...

Maybe all we are is falling stars...

Maybe falling stars is who we are...

It was a great day and a great year,

or so we told ourselves over a couple of beers.

The old town pub was becoming new

every time we walked in the door it blew.

We were on fire with desire,

walking in with our nice attire.

Turns out we were just burnt-out tires,

living life hanging by the wires.

Wired to not feel and taught to misbehave,

we lost all modesty and we lost so many days

that could have been used better

and that could have been a glow.

I guess that finally now

maybe in the end we know...

Maybe all we have is lost tonight...

Maybe all we had left was one fight...

Maybe all we are is falling stars...

Maybe falling stars is who we are...

Only problem with that is, we're thinking that we were fine.

Were we ever really okay? Was life ever really mine?

Sure, we're broken people now, but what were we once before?

Were we wholly together and fine, or closed behind a door?

Behind that door was a room padded, padded white all around.

We are manic people living in a manic world of sound.

Zooms here, zips there; 

nobody even really cares.

We're just living out our days 

holding on to the thick haze.

Maybe it'll save our life; maybe it'll hold us still.

Or at the end of time, maybe nothing will

because...

Maybe all we have is lost tonight...

Maybe all we had left was one fight...

Maybe all we are is falling stars...

Maybe falling stars is who we are...

Reviews

[Amy R]

Marvelous work!!
my fav lines:
"Maybe all we have is lost tonight...
Maybe all we had left was one fight...
Maybe all we are is falling stars...
Maybe falling stars is who we are..."
I absolutely love the flow of this!
great job Dante..

[Not here]

thanks amy :) i really appreciate you telling me ur favorite lines, and those seemed to be quite popular

[Amy R]

you're welcome again Dante!
feel free to send me requests whenever u write new ones!!

[Not here]

no problemo

[Amy R]

:) .......

[Not here]

amen amen amen

[Amy R]

you're crazy :P

[Not here]

i am i am i am

[Coyote Poetry]

Outstanding poetry my Poet friend.
"Maybe all we have is lost tonight...
Maybe all we had left was one fight...
Maybe all we are is falling stars...
Maybe falling stars is who we are..."
Many falling stars and many fights to be fought. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thanks :) always appreciated coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[andrew mitchell]

Emotionally charged in this write which is one of your most powerful yet!

[Not here]

thanks :) glad you liked it

[B. Maaitah]

This poem from start to finish is captivating, the structure the encore the rhyme and flow.. to the real-life heartbreak that's so greatly conveyed it makes you almost able to touch it.. what a nice talent

[Not here]

thank you very much :) i appreciate it

[The Waterlily Pad]

One of the best! You describe it in such a perfect rhythm that flows and the words have a significant meaning to them, you can relate to what you see in your eyes and place us in full prospects of the situation.... You describe modern life in much common sight as many see. Thank you for this.

[Not here]

thank you for reading it :)

[JayceeC]

David, your growth as a poet is wonderful to see. This piece jas all the hallmarks of hood lyrics. Youve reigned in the rhyme so the reader hears ylur words, not the sounds of the rhymes, and the structure is more consistent.

The refrain is absolutely perfect and sits very comfortably between the stanzas. The repetition in the fist three give structure, the turn adds meaning. Your star is shining.

[Not here]

thank you very much JayceeC :) i really appreciate that

[Tamika Finley]

Lovely work and amazing flow. Holds truth that pure happiness and the thought of having it all together is just an illusion.

[Not here]

thanks alot :) i appreciate the thoughts

[Tamika Finley]

No problem at all

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome write buddy... could very easily be turned into a song with that format... I loved the wording and the flow of the write. Great piece :)

[Not here]

thank you very much AaronFreitas :) i appreciate it

[Stan Lee]

Maybe. One thing I know for sure is that you've penned a fantastic poem here Dante. :)

"We're just living out our days
holding on to the thick haze."

Make the best of each day you've been given and keep smiling :)
Well done.

[Not here]

always keep smiling smiley face :) lol really though thanks for the review

[Melinda McQueen]

There's truth in these words. The chorus rings loudly.
Well penned.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)