Miss Mary Loon

Mary's just a little girl;

Mary really wants a friend.

Her whole life has been a whirl,

a tornado without end.

Tossed between her parents quickly,

after they divorced so soon,

life has always been quite tricky

for little Miss Mary Loon.

Suitcase never quite unpacked

while she walks along in life.

At her father's home she's whacked

and her mother's full of strife.

Mary grew up very poorly,

never really had a home.

After waking up she sorely

decided that she should roam.

Miss Mary Loon packed up her bags,

now a lonely eighteen years.

Dressed only in her mother's rags,

Mary Loon faced all her fears.

Many problems she encountered there,

in a life that's split in two.

Back home her mother lost her hair,

and her father started chew.

Now she wanders lonely bars,

looking for a home in sight.

A man she finds, and all the scars

will be reopened that night.

Miss Mary Loon married that man,

begrudgingly and sad.

Thought it was never in the plan,

he soon would be a dad.

The baby turned out just to be

a girl all her own.

But after many fights, you see,

Mary had a new home.

Now that girl's thrown between

her father and her mom.

And by the time that she's a teen,

she's just a ticking bomb.

Mary watches her crying now

and to her daughter beckoned.

That was a telling moment how

it was Mary the Second.

The cycle repeated much more

and now the tale is heard

of why she wanders lonely bars:

Miss Mary Loon the Third.

Author's Note

The terrible, unbreakable cycle.

Reviews

[closed]

this was a bit like a nursery rhyme
im thinking youre still building up to your new book

[Not here]

thanks :) and i put the prologue and chapter on here

[Ilerah]

Good job once again Dante. I really like this poem here. I enjoyed reading it.

[Not here]

thnks :) glad u liked it

[Samuel Dickens]

I'm far from any kind of poetry authority, but I like this for the message, it being one I know too well. You're absolutely right about it being an unbreakable cycle, and I've seen it happen time and again in my own family.

[Not here]

thank you for understand the message. and im no poetry expert, either, i just dabble in it

[Saddam]

It is nice telling. Sad yet creative.
Your writing skill is very creative and fantastic.
Enjoy reading it.

[Not here]

thank you Saddam :) im glad you enjoy it

[piper]

Sad but true sometimes, very nice work, the rhymes work well and the cadence flows. A deep sad subject that tears t the heart.

[Not here]

thank you very much piper :)

[Robert]

You have very good structure and form here Dante and your subject matter is very true and sad. You have a lot of talent with your writing and it truly shows.

[Not here]

thank you very much robert :)

[andrew mitchell]

A great write depicting generations of hand me downs from not coping with life and family!

[Not here]

thank you andrew mitchell :) i appreciate it

[Stan Lee]

Spot on. As hard as Mary Loon tried to break out of the cycle... It's nigh on impossible. Poor Mary, Mary, Mary and all Marys to come....
An introspective and mature theme which you've tackled with expertise.
Well done Dante.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a true tale for many. Years ago. President Clinton stopped the welfare families. Offering schooling and 4 year to get off the welfare. It worked. Today the story of Mary Loon is alive and well again. Can't find opportunity with chance and education. A powerful write my friend. Made old Johnnie think today. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you for reading it coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[guy drori]

Since the very first stanza you are very straight forward with your descriptions. The poem was very clear and you seem to include just the right amount of details. Nice

[Not here]

thank you alot guy drori :)