Miss Mary Loon

Mary's just a little girl;

Mary really wants a friend.

Her whole life has been a whirl,

a tornado without end.

Tossed between her parents quickly,

after they divorced so soon,

life has always been quite tricky

for little Miss Mary Loon.

Suitcase never quite unpacked

while she walks along in life.

At her father's home she's whacked

and her mother's full of strife.

Mary grew up very poorly,

never really had a home.

After waking up she sorely

decided that she should roam.

Miss Mary Loon packed up her bags,

now a lonely eighteen years.

Dressed only in her mother's rags,

Mary Loon faced all her fears.

Many problems she encountered there,

in a life that's split in two.

Back home her mother lost her hair,

and her father started chew.

Now she wanders lonely bars,

looking for a home in sight.

A man she finds, and all the scars

will be reopened that night.

Miss Mary Loon married that man,

begrudgingly and sad.

Thought it was never in the plan,

he soon would be a dad.

The baby turned out just to be

a girl all her own.

But after many fights, you see,

Mary had a new home.

Now that girl's thrown between

her father and her mom.

And by the time that she's a teen,

she's just a ticking bomb.

Mary watches her crying now

and to her daughter beckoned.

That was a telling moment how

it was Mary the Second.

The cycle repeated much more

and now the tale is heard

of why she wanders lonely bars:

Miss Mary Loon the Third.

Author's Note

The terrible, unbreakable cycle.

Reviews

[KittyKatgirl]

Naww that's so sad. The poor girl has been through so much and when she finally finds solace in a man's arms she loses him and watches her daughter go through the same things she did.

[Not here]

yeah i agree its sadd :(

[KittyKatgirl]

Yeah good job though by the way

[kanyinsola okafor]

a constructive piece, it depicts emotions real and sad.

[Shivai]

Simple words rhyming in my ears as the implicit meaning brings tears to my ears.
Truly a wonderful piece, well written!

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Confused Canteloupe]

If i could rate this a 200 i would. Took me a second to catch the rhythm but once I did it clicked so smoothly.

[Not here]

thank you :) i appreciate your review

[Lizardo]

Wow this is just amazing and sad and a lot of other emotions I just can describe.
You outdone yourself with this poem and its a hard truth, you see all of those kind of things here in El Salvador, teens getting pregnant at such a young age and they either abort or just let their child dissappear somewhere else.
This is a really good poem David, It is an awesome poem, this is going to my favorite right away.
Awesome man, simply awesome.

[Mila]

Wonderful! Very clear, and you put your thoughts together in a very powerful way. This seems like something I would read in a lit class and analyze in discussion, it's that good! Well done!

[Sarah Hampton]

An excellent portrayal of the cycle and very well written.

I disagree that it is unbreakable, in my experience it is in one's breaking and remaking which breaks the cycle. But that is just my opinion and the differences are what keep it interesting.

I loved the read, thanks for sharing.

[Not here]

thats true, i agree with you on that point. I think i just feel, in my town, it sometimes appears so hopeless and terrible, I'm inclined to exaggerate.

[Sarah Hampton]

Always a writers right. ;-)

[Not here]

lol agreed :)

[Emily]

I just loved it!
It was deep, I am a big fan of deep poems!
I love her name!
Her last name reminds me of the duck 'Loon', I live in Minnesota, that's our state bird.
Keep it up!

[Not here]

lol i didnt even know that about minnesota :) cool

[Ishita Dixit]

Oh my God.
This was so hard hitting.
As it is this evening I am quite emotional having just watched Wuthering Heights, and now this poem.
You write so excellently well.
My heart reaches out to all those Mary Loons out there.
Great job.

[Not here]

thank you :) and im glad you enjoyed reading

[FlatLineBeauty]

A sweet rhyme with a deep meaning. You've stunned me once again. xx!

[Not here]

thank you very much :)