Someday

They say that I am super powered;

raise me high to where I'm towered;

with their praise I'm often showered...

SOMEDAY.

Time passes so quickly by me

when they raise me up so highly.

All I wish is peace entirely...

SOMEDAY.

I am "superb alliteration."

I am "the newest best sensation."

Seems like I should be on probation...

SOMEDAY.

Comments, critics, both are slowly

building me up to look holy.

I'd trade it all for the whole me...

SOMEDAY.

Comments, critics, both inspire me,

but I have an urgent, dire need.

I wish I could change the irony...

SOMEDAY.

What if I said it was all whack?

What if I wanted my life back?

What if I turned away to pack...

SOMEDAY.

If this road is just the wrong track,

if my life is under attack,

will they ever let me turn back...

SOMEDAY?

Reviews

[Emily]

I like this one!
Keep it up!

[Not here]

thank you :)

[~]

I like the presentation and the smooth transition of this poem. A great message of what can a society do the individual.

[Not here]

thanks :) and your name sounds like a very yummy candy

[~]

mmmm, i think so too :D

[KittyKatgirl]

Haha skittles are delicous.

[Not here]

lol they should make some

[Stan Lee]

Awesome poem Dante. The rhythm and rhyming are excellent!! The structure and interesting story line made your poem an easy and enjoyable read.
Well done.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Stan Lee]

Anytime! Interesting that you say you put a lot of thought into this one. Usually too much thought makes poems sound strained and try-hard... but this one is perfect. :)

[Not here]

thanks :) i appreciate the compliment

[Willard Wells]

Well I could feel a beat as I read it, but I am sure the beat I heard was far different than you hear as you wrote it. I like it. Nice flow, good feel.

[Not here]

well any beat is a good beat :)

[Willard Wells]

That is a very good thought. "As the Beat Goes On".

[Not here]

lol :) yeah

[Cool Girl]

It's stunning! Wow...the word choice was magnificent. I absolutely loved it! I love how you used the word "someday". It was really cool! Overall, amazing job :)

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Cool Girl]

My pleasure!