Someday

They say that I am super powered;

raise me high to where I'm towered;

with their praise I'm often showered...

SOMEDAY.

Time passes so quickly by me

when they raise me up so highly.

All I wish is peace entirely...

SOMEDAY.

I am "superb alliteration."

I am "the newest best sensation."

Seems like I should be on probation...

SOMEDAY.

Comments, critics, both are slowly

building me up to look holy.

I'd trade it all for the whole me...

SOMEDAY.

Comments, critics, both inspire me,

but I have an urgent, dire need.

I wish I could change the irony...

SOMEDAY.

What if I said it was all whack?

What if I wanted my life back?

What if I turned away to pack...

SOMEDAY.

If this road is just the wrong track,

if my life is under attack,

will they ever let me turn back...

SOMEDAY?

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

I really love the thought-provoking end to this poem. Extremely well written!

[Not here]

thank you very much :) im glad you enjoyed it

[Amy R]

this is another fav of mine, i really liked the way u wrote it,
The 4/5th and last stanza was best!
great work Dante!

[Not here]

guess what? ima say thank you again. thank you amy :)

[Amy R]

my pleasure Dante ! :)

[Kshitij Gupta]

This has to be one of the most relatable poems I've come across. Loved the last stanza. Great work mate!

[Not here]

thanks :) your reviews mean alot

[Ada]

Lots of rhyming, was nice.
You used back twice for rhyming in the end
Made feelings build up in my chest like was going to battle

[Not here]

thanks for the review :) i appreciate it alot

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Quite different than from what you usually write, but as powerful as all your other amazing writings. I can imagine a person who gets to the top of fame, money, and glory, and realizes that he went astray. He wonders if there is a way to go back, to revert back, to undo. Unfortunately, we cannot undo things in life, but we can go forward with lessons learned and change our path for the better.

[Not here]

thanks for the review :)

[WordShaker33]

Amazing poem! I could feel the emotion with every word and made me able to relate. Wonderful job.

[Not here]

thank you alot :)

[WordShaker33]

You're very welcome.

[Not here]

yeah yeah yeah mon ;)

[Lizardo]

I love this poem, you know I love poems that make me think
(sorry for coming so late to review David :( )
I really like the thought that you put on this poem, it seems like a lot of people tell you that you're the best but you can't seem to believe that, so what you do is to think about all of that stuff that they tell you to the future, that maybe someday you'll be what they say you are.
For me you are already one of the greatest here, your writing is simply amazing. The last someday?
Maybe gives weight to my theory, that you think that someday, you'll be an amazing person, more thatn you already are.
Nice poem David, I really like this one.

[Not here]

thank you very much lizardo :) this is one of my favorite

[Lizardo]

I can see why :)

[Not here]

thanks man :)

[written_in_the_stars]

Your poem stood out to me the moment I saw it. The form is amazing and makes the reader want to continue reading. The vagueness of the poem actually serves to give it depth, as it makes the reader reflect on his or her own life and wonder what about yours inspired you to write this. Great job, you're a natural :)

[Not here]

thank you very much :) and i like to make them vague enough tht people can relate and think about their own life

[piper]

Hi Dante, So this one is interesting, I have a question, when you wrote this were you writing your true feelings, or is this strcitly creative invention? I'm just curious to know, I really like the way you worked the structure of this poem, the rhyming flows, and this is my favorite part
"I am "superb alliteration."
I am "the newest best sensation."
Seems like I should be on probation..."

Once again nice work!

[Not here]

its a little of both. almost everything i write in some way or another reflects my feelings or parts of them. and thanks for the review, im glad to answer any questions you have

[piper]

Thanks! Keep up the good work!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Left reader with thoughts and places.
"Comments, critics, both inspire me,
but I have an urgent, dire need.
I wish I could change the irony.."
I like the word irony. Can be something different for each reader. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

no problem :) thank you for reading coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dante.