Nightmare

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

Don't you remember back in the day

when everybody lived life in the way

that nowadays seems so un-phased.

We lived and did what we pleased. They

could not affect our display

that we chose to put on. Hey,

we used to be so amazing

until we let them begin fazing

us with their unnatural sayings.

"You're not good enough, you're just playing.

This isn't your thing, start praying

if you want to begin slaying

these giants in your way, weighing

you down again." They're swaying

your opinion right? Betraying

what you believe is dismaying

and will not help at all. Preying

beasts are surveying

you're scared carcass. Perhaps

you already look like scraps

because you're walking into traps

by giving up. If you collapse

I can promise you'll relapse

back and be stuck in the gaps

created by the fall.

I hope you have someone to call

when you begin to crawl

back to the finish line. All

of your hope was given away

when you spent the entire day

alone and without a friend.

This nightmare has no end.

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

It's insane and automatic

shocking through me like some crazy static.

Electricity never felt so alive

even if I won't exactly do what I call thrive.

I'm on a road to a climatic,

fanatic and often dogmatic

finish to my problematic

trail through all this darn traumatic

stress that's beating upon me.

How am I supposed to be free

of this pain, shame, and insane fear

when I can't get over it drawing near

while it continues to quite frankly jeer

at me. This is my richest year

but haunted by this nightmare clear.

If I could just have a hope to escape

then maybe my plans could take shape

but as for me now, I must roam

and hope to find a different home.

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

Reviews

[flickering candle]

this blows my mind. Rhyming is perfect. Your repetition insinuates the main point even more. your descriptions are so vivacios and blood. I love it. A cry of help from a nightmare.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[JayceeC]

David this one pretty much blows smoothly all the way through. The only line I would look for a change is in the refrain. You have "you just to wait for it to play out" You either needs to be you're or you need to drop the word "to" so that it reads more smoothly and grammatically correct. overall a good right. Jan

[Willard Wells]

While I despise "Rap" for the most part, I appreciate the words off spoken. Clearly a large amount of "Rap" is poetic in content. I just hate to see great words ruined with bad music. Your words here bring a feel of suffering and the need to get away. Thanks for sharing.

[Ishita Dixit]

Excellent rhyming.
A nice and thought provoking poem.
Thanks for sharing!

[closed]

i think this is about finding your place
and how sometimes it's tough when thier's opposition

i really like the wordplay, which you always make fun

the poem ends on a hopeful note by telling us we should persevere, in spite of the conflict, of the dark, and the emptiness

really good poem David

-Dream

[Not here]

thank you dream :) i appreciate it

[closed]

np
and anytime

[Lizardo]

Another great poem from you David! I love the words full of power and flow of the poem.
Great rhyming.
I really like this one David, everyone of us has a nightmare, it may be a catastrophe like you put it out.
Great poem

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

What sort of new home? everything else fits perfectly. I'm nothing and nobody, nobody living around me gives a s**t about my fucked up life, i give up on everything that i can't solve, and will give up easier after each day, though i've got no intention to start crawling out of it, cause even after i do, i just fall into another shithole again. i'm living in a bloody nightmare, no hope in it at all...so it fits me almost perfectly.