Nightmare

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

Don't you remember back in the day

when everybody lived life in the way

that nowadays seems so un-phased.

We lived and did what we pleased. They

could not affect our display

that we chose to put on. Hey,

we used to be so amazing

until we let them begin fazing

us with their unnatural sayings.

"You're not good enough, you're just playing.

This isn't your thing, start praying

if you want to begin slaying

these giants in your way, weighing

you down again." They're swaying

your opinion right? Betraying

what you believe is dismaying

and will not help at all. Preying

beasts are surveying

you're scared carcass. Perhaps

you already look like scraps

because you're walking into traps

by giving up. If you collapse

I can promise you'll relapse

back and be stuck in the gaps

created by the fall.

I hope you have someone to call

when you begin to crawl

back to the finish line. All

of your hope was given away

when you spent the entire day

alone and without a friend.

This nightmare has no end.

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

It's insane and automatic

shocking through me like some crazy static.

Electricity never felt so alive

even if I won't exactly do what I call thrive.

I'm on a road to a climatic,

fanatic and often dogmatic

finish to my problematic

trail through all this darn traumatic

stress that's beating upon me.

How am I supposed to be free

of this pain, shame, and insane fear

when I can't get over it drawing near

while it continues to quite frankly jeer

at me. This is my richest year

but haunted by this nightmare clear.

If I could just have a hope to escape

then maybe my plans could take shape

but as for me now, I must roam

and hope to find a different home.

It's a nightmare, a catastrophe,

full of everyone else's blasphemy.

There's no escape, and no way out;

you just to wait for it to play out.

So take a second to just look around

because this is the new home you've found.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts. I had to read again. Always a pleasure to read your words Mr. Dante.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you coyote :) im glad you liked it and thank you for all of the reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure and you are welcome.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Just reading this and some other writing of yours I assume that religion was forced down your throat like mine. This really makes me relate. My parents dragged me every time the damn doors were open. When I turned from the path though they basically disowned me. I hope you find peace. Stay strong and follow your spirit. If something is right for you, you will know. Sometimes religion or faith doesn't help at all. I found my own spiritual path. I don't think there is too much of a specific label for me, but I'm more at peace than before. It's okay to be different. :) xo karma

[Not here]

thanks for the encouragement :) im just confused and different but im alright

[FlatLineBeauty]

Different is a wonderful thing. I do understand the confusion. You were born original, never die a copy. If you ever need to talk you know how to reach me :)

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

Nice Write.. Like your style..

[Not here]

yeah yeah yeah mon :) thanks

[ANTO]

Superb alliteration in this modern day reality version of a Grimms tale. We lost our way didn't we?
top notch wordsmithing here DK.

[Not here]

wordsmithing...thats some superb wordsmithing right there

[dan]

david, This piece is again written in your trademark stream-of-consciousness style, but it has a more finite delineation you impart with your framework that supports the entire write. The three 'choruses' throughout the piece help to construct that framework and help to define your ideas. I don't usually like quoting specific lines in my reviews, but I especially loved this one: "If you collapse I can promise you'll relapse back and be stuck in the gaps created by the fall." One of your better works, nice job! take care...dan

[Not here]

thank you alot dan :) and best of luck to you man with everything man

[Saddam]

Blowing work.
Great rhythm and flow.
Great read as always.

[Julia Mars]

This flows like an eminem or linkin park song.
Totally edgy.

[Not here]

lol :) ive heard alot of people say that

[yvo miki]

this poem flows like a river I can say it was the best I read of urs ur a natural and don't need help u know how to make it flow and how to make the reader want more and nightmares can do that to u most the time that play over and over in ur head never to go away never stop writing for I belive u will go far

[AaronFreitas]

I like this write my friend. Very deep and passionate write! I think in the 4th line you have an extra to in the line... good write!

[Confuser]

David: This is by far your greatest work. I love it...you kept the flow throughout, poem wrap or both it is fabulous work. You are talented and I'm so glad you kept it out. The words you speak are an accumulation of frustration about the changing world in which we have no control and you are loud and clear my friend, and so right. It can be a nightmare to feel trapped in society's dogma, not allowing self-expression, so many rules and some make no sense at all; great insight for a young man. Please keep writing. One suggestion, would be I must roam this crazy dome and find a different home. I thank you so very much. Dale

[Not here]

thank you alot dale :)

[Confuser]

You're welcome....