With You

I'm here, 

all alone.

I wish I 

could call your phone.

No more

time for me

to wait and

watch you be

with someone

else I know.

Just give me

a chance to show

everything

is what I'd go through

if I got a minute

to be with you.

I guess we will never know

all the places we could go.

I just hope that I show

I feel remorse, honest, so

there is nothing that I owe

to you. I've decided to stow

all of my feelings below

and I'm determined even though

letting them out may make me glow.

But that doesn't matter really, no,

they only turn out to bestow

unwanted feelings. I forego

all involvement with them. Oh,

how it hurts in the night.

All alone while I fight,

and my emotions take a bite.

They continue to darken the light

inside of my soul. Right

or left I cannot quite

decide which way my plight

leads me to follow. Write

and write some more is delight.

It leads me to better sight

of the world around me. Tight,

it's strangling me. Might

is fading from me. Polite

is leaving me while fright

invades me tonight.

I'm here, 

all alone.

I wish I 

could call your phone.

No more

time for me

to wait and

watch you be

with someone

else I know.

Just give me

a chance to show

everything

is what I'd go through

if I got a minute

to be with you.

It's like a shock to my brain wave system

every time you walk in the door. You glisten

with light coming out from around you, I

have no idea how to respond. Why

do you gotta be so dang pretty?

To be honest, really, it is such a pity

that I will never have you for my own.

Baby, I would even take a gigantic loan

out from the karma bank if you

would just give me a chance. Let me through

those barriers you put up all around.

Look, I'll climb the highest mound

of hate and love and life and pain

if only it would mean that I would gain

you for a moment, a minute in time.

Time freezes now as in this rhyme

you cross my mind and in my head

I fall asleep dreaming of you instead.

Those other girls were nothing, okay.

All I want is you to be my bae.

B.A.E. Before Anyone Else.

I mean that, I'll always put you before myself.

Never ever, no, never would I put you down.

I spend my days flipping around that frown.

Never shut a door in your face.

Someday take you and buy a place.

Yeah, if this happens to be a race,

I'm sprinting into your arms. Case

closed, I'm the winner.

Now let's go out to dinner.

I'll pay for it if you pay me

by letting me be your baby.

Wake up from that dream.

Lips want to scream.

Brain seems to deem

me insane. Lean

into my pillow

Lost all my will, oh,

I wish it was you.

I wish you were too

close to me to be cold.

Maybe if I was bold,

but I let you slip away

and I regret it another day.

Author's Note

There's always one that gets away...

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Nice write my friend. Keep it coming. I like your writing.

[closed]

An acute work conveying how missing someone can be the worst

personifying the depth by which you would give anything to see them...

another avant garde' poetic expression^


-Dream

[Maumil Mehraj]

i liked the first 4 paras a lot, and then the poem was nice and lyrical...And i can sense that it came straight from your heart, so i appreciate it even more.
Good job, as always!
Maumil

[Rodger Tunif]

It is interesting that you were able to find so many words that rhymed and I applaud this. Other than that, I find no real value to this poem. It's really two poems mixed into one. It is not the one who adds much, but the one who knows how little to have who is the true artist. I understand this might be a healthy expression of your feelings and thus have subjective value to you. However, you get comical towards the end with lazy expressions and I simply don't find anything that you said compelling or revealing of human experience. A loan from the karma bank? I did not enjoy this poem at all.

[Riley Justine]

Such a cute and romantic piece yet it's still so sad. I love it.