Golden Peak

Until I fall, until I lose

I will brawl and never confuse

everything that I once did seek.

I've arrived at my golden peak.

Peak behind this curtain of gold.

Welcome to my golden peak, so bold.

I've spent days here just trying to mold

my wishes into my work I sold.

Selling it to whoever will behold

and buy it for a thousand fold

of what it may be worth. Untold

stories are meant to be now unrolled.

All told, I will now stand and uphold

my life under all circumstances. To fold

is not an option, because I foretold

my future is about to just explode.

My potential is just much too bright

so I put on my sunglasses. Right

away I turn around. Night

is crashing in on me tight.

I'm suffocating forthright

from all the dark and my might

is starting to just turn quite

weakly into a more slight

version of what it was in spite

of my best efforts to stay upright.

Until I fall, until I lose

I will brawl and never confuse

everything that I once did seek.

I've arrived at my golden peak.

I'm a little cheeky,

my rhymes are just too squeaky,

so I turn a little freaky

when I get into my creaky

rocking chair while I'm sneaky.

Sneaking around so sleekly,

trying to find a peak. See

I'm on the road to victory.

This is my new story.

Writing my book of glory

even while my inventory

looks like an abandoned quarry.

Rocks, stocks, bonds and flocks

are nothing more than road blocks.

I don't need fame to start this walk.

Success is not the main thing I stalk.

Talking boxes, full of squawking squawks.

I spend everyday just breaking rocks

that keep on refusing to crumble.

I keep spitting out these words I mumble.

Until I fall, until I lose

I will brawl and never confuse

everything that I once did seek.

I've arrived at my golden peak.

Rapidity rap-rap, rhyming real realistically.

Learning linguistically to flow artistically.

Characteristically, I rhyme statistically

but unrealistically expect optimistically.

Lines like that are lines that cause

lines to stand outside and pause

as they wait for hours on end

for my linear shows to begin, my friend.

Lines flow smooth like lines on ice,

creating shapes that so much entice.

One, two, three, four, almost there.

One last time fixing up my hair.

The curtains open, here we go.

Finally it's time for my favorite show.

The crowds are roaring, happily.

Critics dare not now snap at me.

Unashamedly, I mumble these rhymes,

spit out things that might be considered crimes.

But as I said before, this perfectly sleek

road leads to my far-off golden peak.

Author's Note

The peak might be far off, but it is still reachable.

Reviews

[Peach]

In my opinion, I think that this can be related to perseverance and goals. And, if you mind my asking, what's with the pic?

[Reeg]

Wow this is really a piece of art! :D
Love it man. (:

[Not here]

thank you alot :)

[Julia Mars]

Gosh, that was amazing! Nice job!

[Not here]

thank you alot :)

[Julia Mars]

You're welcome!

[AaronFreitas]

What an awesome piece buddy... love the flow... awesome write.

[Not here]

thanks man :)

[Willard Wells]

Never say die.

Great message and as someone that in attempting to improve my writing; If it rhymes it is most likely by accident.

There is swagger in your words driven by your knowledge of your quality work. They say if a man does what makes him happy he will be happy his whole life and I wish you a life of happiness.

You are no accident and I feel that the piece truly speaks of your devotion to your writing and it will take you to the golden peak in time.

Beautiful done and beautifully written. I bow to your skill. Peace out.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Riley Justine]

This piece is bloody amazing!

[Maumil Mehraj]

I read a couple of your poems and i must say they are very lyrical and flowing. Plus, i don't know, i kind of feel that writing is your supreme consolation in life.
Good job, sir!

[Not here]

thank you :) im glad you feel that way cause its true

[closed]

creative as ever
and always finding new ways



-Dream

[zwartenkot]

loved this the rhyming was amazing

[Not here]

thank you :) glad you think so

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Just to let you know, I think you meant to write "lose" not "loose" in your repeating stanzas. Otherwise no other mistakes have been found!

A very ambitious piece of musical writing. You trying to reach the top with obstacles in between, but never giving up. That is the way to go, the motto to live by. Another wonderful work. I'd love to hear it someday!

[Not here]

thank you :) ill fix that typo too