Dear Haters

Wrote this to Kanye's "Runaway" piano part

I'm moving on,

I'm pushing through

and in every little

thing I do

I'm proving now

and saying loud

that I won't bow

under the weight of clouds.

Your tears are cried

sadly in vain

because I have tried

in the pouring rain

to find a cure,

a masterpiece

that would for sure

help me find faster peace.

Now, at last,

I'm long gone.

My latest past

is what I'm moving on.

I dedicate this

to all of you

who lived in bliss,

ignorant of who

was crushed by

your foolish pride.

You thought you were in the sky, 

cloud nine. Your soul died

if you had one before.

And now your left standing, so obscured

by the clouds, the tears,

the haze, the fears.

Nothing could stop you

from pushing on through

and becoming a person that nobody likes.

You all who hurt me and my little trikes,

yeah, you. You know who you are

and you know exactly how exactly far

I will go 

just to show

that you don't know

who I am. No,

the tears you cry are fake.

And maybe someday you'll take

a loan from the karma bank

and it'll come right around to spank

in the behind. You know I'm behind

every origination that helps the free find

more freedom in becoming generous.

You are much more ungenerous.

Someday you will find that generous

people don't find very generous

ways to forgive you who generously

gave me lots of pain. I generously

give you this poem, right here, you cow.

Watch out. I'm coming your way, now.

Reviews

[613]

This was very well written! 99% of it was not cliche; that's awesome! I don't know if I was supposed to or not, but I laughed out loud at, "I generously give you this poem, right here, you cow. Watch out. I'm coming your way, now." Something about it screams I'M ANGRY AT YOU, but another part of it comes across as comical (& that's a good thing!) Great work.

- Brittney

[Not here]

thanks :) i just go kinda crazy when im in writing mode lol

[613]

I think we all can relate to that from time to time for sure!

[Not here]

lol yeah probly

[Ishita Dixit]

Haters gonna hate!
But we couldn't care less, right?
And if we're being hated, its because we're better than their best nightmares!
Good write. :)

[Not here]

lol thats a great way to put it :)

[Sunny]

Wow! This is great it's strong, and I can feel the emotion behind it! "Kill them with kindness," is what I hope you can do.
Anyways it's great!
~Alice

[Not here]

thanks alice :)

[Sunny]

Anytime David! :D

[Cool Girl]

It helps to write your feelings out!

I think the only thing holding you back from pure happiness now is yourself..

You need to release yourself from these chains of sorrow.

Be like a bird, and spread those wings of yours :)

[Not here]

you sound like dream now in your reviews :) sorry just saying. it means yall been talky talking. thanks for your reviews :)

[Cool Girl]

We haven't been talking about you, I swear. I was just being truthful. I've been broken before.. It hurts. But anyways, you're welcome! :)

[Not here]

lol i wouldnt mind if you were i was js. :)

[Cool Girl]

Oh.. Well, whatever :)

[Riley Justine]

Really harsh to those who are so proud it hurts them.

[Not here]

thank you very much for all of your reviews :)

[Riley Justine]

My pleasure! If there's one thing I want to say about this poem its that some people act like the person labelled as the hater here because they feel like it's the only way to protect themselves. Because when you say you know who you are I felt like you were talking to me. But the only reason I have ever acted like I was the best and put people down and pushed them away is because I felt like I was the worst. Many people who act like this see it as a sort of protection from their real feelings

[Not here]

yeah your right. i realized that afterwards and i didnt mean for so many people to take it like that. it turned out differently than i had intended, so ive made sure to anyone who mentions to tell them that it wasnt directed towards them in any way whatsoever. this is directed to my people in my life, and we all have those people who hate on us. but life is complicated in itself, one poem could never convey everything.

[Riley Justine]

True enough. Thanks so much for clarifying =)

[Not here]

no problem :) hey i just wrote a new poem. i would rlly appreciate if you check it out whenever you have the time. actually i think i sent you a read request anyway so yeah.

[Riley Justine]

Sounds good! I'll probably be able to read it later this evening!

[Elisa]

Wooo sick burn! Sick burn! I would love to see someone's face if you aimed this at them! Each line is like a punch to the haters' faces! I especially liked the part with the karma bank, and the repeated use of generosity in so many innovative ways. I really liked this one!

[Not here]

thank you alot :) im glad you liked it

[closed]

Bold, brash, and savvy


you don't know it yet
but your pen has already healed alot of your wounds David

now you just need to free yourself

then you will move forward into greatness still


-Dream

[dan]

david, Wow you really have a score to settle with the 'haters' in your life. You sound bound and determined to point out to all that you are standing your ground, you're not apologizing for your words or deeds and if someone doesn't like it they can kiss your a*s. You've drawn a line in the sand daring the haters to cross it, and I have to admire your stance. A lot of power in this piece. take care...dan

[Not here]

thanks dan :) and your right

[Emily]

This is my favorite one from you!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hey David. Thanks for the request... sorry I'm not in the mood... so I may be wrong, but I had the feeling that you think that I hate somebody... well I don't... at least nobody on this site. Again, sorry, I'm probably wrong. And now, to the point... The poem is well written. Sorry, not too many nice words from me right now, cause I'm not in the mood. Its probably well done.

[Not here]

its ok. sorry dude i shouldnt have sent you a request because i know that you are going through things that I could not ever understand. i hope things get better for you dude. just keep going. life is hard but its worth it in the end

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thanks. Its not the request... its the title. Dear haters ... well you know.. suggested that... well whatever. Its over complicated.

[Not here]

oh ok i see. and no i was just writing towards the people in my life who hate on me and hate me. I was writing from our stand, all of us who have been discriminated or stereotyped or hurt by others. not towards anyone on here or about anyone. just for everyone whos gone through that stuff

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh... okay:) Then I should be thanking you.. Thanks:)