Young

Do you believe poems can increase your feelings

and affect the way you act during your dealings

with everyday life and strife and all the accolades

they pile onto you for during things your own way?

Well all the accolades and fame

could never hope to sustain

the emotional highs

I get when I rap rhymes

or when I let go

and let everything show.

Haters gonna' hate

so why take all the bait

they throw into the water?

They don't protect their own daughter

but they expect me

to do things that are impossibly 

hard and full of difficulty

while I live in a mystery.

Just because I don't want them to see

what is happening really.

My subjects wanna see their king

staying on top of everything thing

and showing every single ring

and every single piece of bling

because they want me to be ghetto

as long as gangsters are still cool.

So what happens when they get old

and start acting like a fool?

I'm never taking that fall,

and I'm never gonna go call

the retirement center for care

because every day for me is a dare

to prove to the world that I'm far-flung

from their typical ways. I'll always stay young.

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yeah! I can totally get this! Its cool! Very well done!

[Riley Justine]

Amazing piece here. It can be easily related to and it flows so easily. Awesome job with this one, David!

~Ri

[Not here]

thanks for reviewing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I do believe can help us.
"Do you believe poems can increase your feelings
and affect the way you act during your dealings
with everyday life and strife and all the accolades
they pile onto you for during things your own way?"
Releasing words allow us to feel freedom from the memory. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. Good poetry make the reader think. Your poetry did.
Coyote

[Not here]

:) thanks dude. i really appreciate your review and telling me what you thought of it

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cool Girl]

This was so good! You always manage to impress me every single time :) Congratulations for being such a great writer! Lol

[Not here]

Lol thanks :)

[Cool Girl]

Anytime :)

[Emily]

'My subjects wanna see their king'
I like how this line is written!
Well done!

[Not here]

thanks :) i appreciate the review

[Demon-Lover]

I like the way you wrote this poem to describe the way you feel. I really liked this poem. Keep up with the work I would like to read more. :)

[Not here]

i have plenty more that ive already written and published. if you check them out i would really appreciate it

[Demon-Lover]

I have read more and they are all inspiring. I really like your work.

[Not here]

thanks dude

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Another great piece, can't wait to read the next master piece. :)

[Not here]

:) lol thanks. i really appreciate it

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :) lol!

[Not here]

lol dont laugh at me :) jk

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

hehe! :) :)

[Deepika]

I just love the fluency of your thoughts and the carefree attitude in your words! Another great work :))

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[closed]

I know what you mean

just like the most famous literary example
Peter Pan and the Lost Boys, who could live forever

Never grow old. Never die...

Isn't that the greatest promise of youth?

That's why it's good to immortalize ourselves as artists now

this is our legacy


another great write


-Dream