Humble Masterpiece

Here it goes...

My rhyming flows...

Tired of my shows?

Get ready. Those

were what I chose

to appease the rows

who wanted to depose

this masterful C. E. O.

they say has overexposed

all the secrets under his nose.

They say I lead psychos

and honestly I suppose

they have a stone to throw

but even they don't know

where I am ready to go.

I'm gonna take my flow

to the end of the world, so no

I won't sit back below

you people who bestow

all the fame to John Doe's

writing. It's just so-so

so I'm gonna let this blow...

Bitten, smitten, 

back-stabbed, low-handed and hidden.

Hurt, abused by different views.

Persecuted like Jews in World War Two.

Everyone else constantly amused

by all the things that make me confused.

So give me a second, may I be excused?

I have to go find a bomb and defuse

'cause I'm Superman

with a super plan

when this all began

I dreamed of black sedans

but now the span

of a few years

maybe a few too many beers

coupled with a lot of tears

soon enough I could disappear

and they'd blow up like a bombardier.

Why don't they just come and see this

all of these humble masterpieces?

Pretending I'm just full of great bliss

whilst I'm lost in this deep black abyss.

But I can't afford to reminisce

all those memories turn to wisps.

Those memories fly away in the wind

once again I find a friend

stabbing me in the back again.

How did this become such a trend?

Is this really the end

of all the good times? Pretend

that we are nothing more than two

people who unfortunately accrued

lots of hippity-bippity-bop-boo.

That's what we called the magic

but it turned out to be tragic

we lost everything we hoped for

and now I'm here sitting at your door

wishing for just one more

kiss or hug. And I swore

that I would never abhor

you but what happened post-war

between us made me explore

the things that I had ignored.

I realized who I could be,

so I became a new me,

a me that you will never see

because your stuck up your own tree

living your life on emotional sprees,

pretending your fine when you won't be.

You won't be, 

you can't be, 

because after I gave you everything 

you broke me,

you choked me,

and now you just provoke me

on purpose. 

You woke me

and now this beast won't ever sleep.

I'm too busy eating those sheep

you count as you lay in a curled heap

your new man beside you as you reap

the seeds you sowed.

I'll always know

what it's like

to fight a fight

against the odds

against the frauds.

So here I am and I'll never cease

making this, my humble masterpiece.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy the masterpiece.
"Pretending I'm just full of great bliss
whilst I'm lost in this deep black abyss.
But I can't afford to reminisce
all those memories turn to wisps."
Had the feel of a modern day masterpiece. Life had lost the old glory of romance and large weddings. New world had directness and leftover the magic of old. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

Thank you alot for your in-depth review :) i really appreciate it

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Tania]

Nicely written ! Enjoyed reading this ..
_Beyourself

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

An awesome write, nicely penned.

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Well done!

[Riley Justine]

Awesome poem David! Really well penned

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful, indeed a masterpiece as for reading as for looking at. :) Rudi

[closed]

very rock star
my kind of poem^


-Dream

[Not here]

thanks :) glad you liked it

[Cool Girl]

I liked it! It's going in my favorites :)
You should really try rapping!
I think you'd be good at it..

[Not here]

Lol i could be a beast white rapper :) but i just pretend im jamaican

[Cool Girl]

very interesting.....

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"low-handed, and hidden." - Comma/ and problem.

"while I'm lost in this deep black abyss." - Whilst not while

"all those memories turn to wisps.
They wisp away in the wind." - What does this mean?? Perhaps "All those memories turn to wisp away in the wind"


"I realized who I could be,
and I became a new me,
a me that you will never see" - EDIT

Overall I think this is the most intelligent piece you have ever written, I adore the layout and the flow is incredible the content itself is witty and gripping really good work well done my favorite of all your work very mature a new side of you is shown and shines brightly through this piece.

[Not here]

Thank you alot for your review! it was very helpful and i will edit those