Stuck in a Dream

I'm stuck in a dream,

balancing on the beam

above the deep hole

where I'm too afraid to go.

Never taking the time to theme

all the things that continue to stream

out of my mouth and soul

as I let go and blow.

Living here in my beautiful palace,

bright as aurora borealis;

unique as the flakes made of snow and

living my life lookin so grand.

Music playin in my head twenty-four seven

even though my I spend my nights at a seven-eleven;

most days it seems like I'm on the pathway to heaven

even though I'm cut off like western Berlin

during world war two. I'm straight up stuck; I'm screwed

and all alone but I can't brood

on all the joy and hope I allude

to in my rhymes. I pursued

them to the edge of the world

but once again I was hurled

off of my edge of despair

into a dream world where affairs

of my life seem to come so easy

but now I'm feeling so queasy

so it's time to shut off easy-peasey

and turn on my power immortal

as I step into this dream portal.

Reviews

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing write, beautiful imagery, nicely penned.

[closed]

very sublime
it captures the concept of dreams exquisitely well

I know youre going through a lot right now

but know that you can outrun time

and you can do it

-In Dreams



-Dream

[Riley Justine]

Awesome rhyming scheme. Your writing is always insanely good.

[Emily]

Nicely worded!
Well done!

[Sunny]

Wow this was great! The rhyme scheme is also very nicely done!

[Mary Bradley]

Well written Poem ... sad but I feel the strength in it

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem was very good. Left me with more questions than answers.
"Living here in my beautiful palace,
bright as aurora borealis;
unique as the flakes made of snow and
living my life lookin so grand."
Was the dream wanted or not. The good description create place and thoughts. I liked the poem. The language was alive and strong bringing the reader to place and understanding. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

Thanks alot coyote, and i appreciate your in-depth review

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cool Girl]

I understand..
Sometimes I feel that way too!
Heck, I always feel that way! lol
Who knows, maybe we are actually living in a dream..
Or maybe this is Heaven! (sure hope not)

I really liked your poem though!
I can tell you put a lot of thought into it :)

[Not here]

Thanks :) and i just like to go with the flow

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome!!

[Not here]

:) yep totes