Rebel

I used to be chained up, ganged up, and hanged up on.

I used to be hurt, ashamed and on my own.

I never took a chance, always passed along the baton.

But now I'm grown up, mature, and in my zone.

Like a dog chasin a bone,

I'm grabbed fame by the throat

and the whole world could groan

but im just starting. I've grown

into this man with this tone

and even though you try to disown

me 

you know you always will know 

me. 

I'll never be unknown. 

See, 

I'm here to stay so loan 

me

your time; this is my throne. 

King,

that's what they all call

me.

It's time to break off these chains

and pick up the remains

of my life that was slayed;

they tried to keep me down in vain.

This is me going insane;

this is me riding my train

towards my uprising fame.

I'm not afraid or ashamed

to go there and put out my name.

And I don't have to be profane

for me to tap into this flame

and set my sights onto this game.

I'm all locked up. My aim

is restin on the same

folks who tried to contain

this beast that I became.

There is no way they could tame

all of these things that I claim

I could do without blame.

Welcome into my brain.

I think I hear the bell,

on the clock next to the well;

Well, I guess this is where I'll dwell.

Yellin out all that I tell

from this hole you call a cell.

Sell my talents and my personnel?

You could make a lot of cash, but oh well,

sorry but that ain't up for sale.

You'll have to go and make your own tale.

Go out and start blazing your own trail,

hoping it won't just be a big fail

but I don't know nothin else your entitled

to. Through all this now your lookin so pale

but you couldn't even compare on a scale

to the excellent chaos I cause when I prevail.

Continuing on through the hardships, don't you agree?

There aren't many appropriate words appropriate to describe me.

But while your sitting there sipping on your green tea,

I'll remain over here, rebellious and free.

And one of these days you can look and up see

what I've become because this is me constantly:

Rebel.

Author's Note

#rebel (if I had twitter. I don't. So underprivileged. Lol)

Reviews

[Mila]

Good stuff here. I liked the structure, and it flowed in a very interesting and unusual way. Well done!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I like it, David. It's almost a rap song, short sentences and also the form is very attractive. Very well done. :) Rudi

[klarity]

This is very powerful stuff davidkummer... Although I have to admit at some point the rhymes kind of get scrambled. But I really liked it. Thank you for the read request ! :)

[Deepika]

Now this pattern is harder than the arrow :P A very lucid and powerful write. It' always good to have the agitation alive, not letting anyone to take us for granted!

[Demii]

I got your read request! I love the form of the writing its really cool actually, my only problem is that there is to many rhyming words close to each other seems sorta scrambled a bit, but overall your message was clear, I liked it !

[Not here]

Lol thanks :)

[Cool Girl]

Gosh, this was really powerful!
The format is super cool!
Lol, I don't have Twitter either..
You did a great job with this!!
Sorry that my reviews are always so short...

[Not here]

Lol my reviews are like two lines so....

[Cool Girl]

Lol, but I still enjoy reading them :)

[Not here]

everybody does, dont ya know?

[Cool Girl]

Lol
No, I really didn't!
Thanks for the info.. :P

[Emily]

I like the meaning!
Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like and understand this poem.
"You'll have to go and make your own tale.
Go out and start blazing your own trail,
hoping it won't just be a big fail"
I told my kids. Travel, test life and have fun. Must work for 50 years. We must keep the rebel alive. For the few to see. Robots of life don't care or know the taste of freedom. Must find people not afraid of seeing and knowing the truth. Very good poetry. You made me think. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. If you get a chance. Read my poem "The w***e bath". I believe you will like.
Coyote

[closed]

very well composed

for starters the format is really kool
i've never tried it before

I don't think

second the flow here is really good
there's alot of attitude, which I like

all in all, this is what you call the ''Epic'' poem
because of all of the ''rebelliousness'' you could say

a poem that self-exalts
I have done that so many times in my writing

you can get called pretentious for it
but it doesnt stop me lol


loved it

-Dream

[Not here]

thanks alot Dream. i really appreciate the feedback

[closed]

No problem.